2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from juliaSjames
I don't believe I ever lost that fantasy aspect of childhood. Maybe because I was an only child and spent so much time in that wonderland that I never fully made it back to what is called the real world. LOL
Made it easy for me to interact with my children and grandchildren when they were little.
Excellent satori in this senryu. TBH I've never felt at home writing this form. I tend to overthink because my first instructor said there should be a sardonic twist and I could never get it right.
Thanks for sharing your expertise
Blessings, Cheryl
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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I don't believe I ever lost that fantasy aspect of childhood. Maybe because I was an only child and spent so much time in that wonderland that I never fully made it back to what is called the real world. LOL
Made it easy for me to interact with my children and grandchildren when they were little.
Excellent satori in this senryu. TBH I've never felt at home writing this form. I tend to overthink because my first instructor said there should be a sardonic twist and I could never get it right.
Thanks for sharing your expertise
Blessings, Cheryl
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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In the 17th century, senryu was written by commun men, they were comic satire, mostly crude poems about women. They were written in taverns. As time went by, senryu has developed into just a poem about human nature on any topic. It's fun to keep your child within alive. I do the same with my children and grandchildren, they love it.
Thank you very much, have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
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Thank you Marival
Comment from Rachelle Allen
That it is!! This is one of my favorite qualities about children: they can ALWAYS invent a way to have a good time! I've seen them amuse themselves in doctors' waiting rooms, in a shopping cart while their mothers are otherwise engaged, and at sports events in which they are not participating and not interested. They ALWAYS choose joy!
Terrific senryu; I enjoyed it very much. xo
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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That it is!! This is one of my favorite qualities about children: they can ALWAYS invent a way to have a good time! I've seen them amuse themselves in doctors' waiting rooms, in a shopping cart while their mothers are otherwise engaged, and at sports events in which they are not participating and not interested. They ALWAYS choose joy!
Terrific senryu; I enjoyed it very much. xo
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
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Same!!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
AMEM!! I love children and don't miss the administration part of teaching, but I really do miss the children. The children were always wonderful. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
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AMEM!! I love children and don't miss the administration part of teaching, but I really do miss the children. The children were always wonderful. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
those kids in the pic laughing and running around go perfect with the words of a wonderland's adventures
a very fun and happy senryu with a cheerful flow and imagery
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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those kids in the pic laughing and running around go perfect with the words of a wonderland's adventures
a very fun and happy senryu with a cheerful flow and imagery
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from Ricky1024
True and so very true.
A child's mind is a amazing thing.
This was well presented Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks Gypsy and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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True and so very true.
A child's mind is a amazing thing.
This was well presented Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks Gypsy and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from GWHARGIS
Oh, to think an see the world like a child again. That would be so cool. It's like that with my grandchildren sometimes. I will finally let loose and see what they see. It may only last a short time before I turn back into a sixty-two year old woman again, but it's fun while it lasts. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Oh, to think an see the world like a child again. That would be so cool. It's like that with my grandchildren sometimes. I will finally let loose and see what they see. It may only last a short time before I turn back into a sixty-two year old woman again, but it's fun while it lasts. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
O, to be a child again!
I see your image, and I remember my I own childhood, what a pleasure it was. It is responsable for how and why I write. I am assuming that who we become in life is connected to our childhood experiences in a significant way. Your imagery is well illustrated. I believe you meant, with time it has developed into a looser form, easy fix.
Thanks for sharing
RJ
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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O, to be a child again!
I see your image, and I remember my I own childhood, what a pleasure it was. It is responsable for how and why I write. I am assuming that who we become in life is connected to our childhood experiences in a significant way. Your imagery is well illustrated. I believe you meant, with time it has developed into a looser form, easy fix.
Thanks for sharing
RJ
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Yes, that's true. As Picasso said, "Learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist." - Pablo Picasso
Thank you very much, have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
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You're welcome
Comment from lyenochka
So true. We as parents and grandparents are privileged to witness those wonderland adventures and encourage their growth in using their creativity as much as possible!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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So true. We as parents and grandparents are privileged to witness those wonderland adventures and encourage their growth in using their creativity as much as possible!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, big sister.
Love
Marival
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy
How true A good senyru and image to match
I love watching my 3 year old granddaughter playing and chatting to her make up friends etc
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Hi Gypsy
How true A good senyru and image to match
I love watching my 3 year old granddaughter playing and chatting to her make up friends etc
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Hey.... I haven't heard from you for so long. How are you?
Thank you very much, Chris
Gypsy
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, a poem of truth. I love the imagery and sensory appeal within.
The Hopscotch photo is priceless. I especially liked:
(endless adventures)
Indeed.
This poem made me smile, and I thank you. Xo. M
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Hi Gypsy, a poem of truth. I love the imagery and sensory appeal within.
The Hopscotch photo is priceless. I especially liked:
(endless adventures)
Indeed.
This poem made me smile, and I thank you. Xo. M
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Margaret
Gypsy