The Unwilling Heir
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18 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Sebastian will be fine. I do believe you've created a new genre of "Christian Ghost Mystery" --
This adds a significant meaning to every one of your chapters, Carol.
I'm so sorry you thought I wouldn't be back.
How could I ever leave you my dear friend!?
I must have stopped ten times to read a sentence...just to savor the skill you pack into each!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Sebastian will be fine. I do believe you've created a new genre of "Christian Ghost Mystery" --
This adds a significant meaning to every one of your chapters, Carol.
I'm so sorry you thought I wouldn't be back.
How could I ever leave you my dear friend!?
I must have stopped ten times to read a sentence...just to savor the skill you pack into each!
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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I prayed really hard for your return but I also understood how hurt you were that someone would attack you in such a way. I know I would be. This site is for our pleasure, not a battling ground. And yes, I hope I presented Faith in a way that wasn't cramming it down anyone's throat. Just showing it as it is! Food for thought so to speak.
Smiles
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Now it looks like Sebastian is lost to them! They have to get him out of there, They have the key to the next clue, but at the moment, all they can think about is Sebastian and the creepy evil spirits who has been captured their friend. What happens now? I have to go and read the next chapter. Love you lots, my very talented writer. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Now it looks like Sebastian is lost to them! They have to get him out of there, They have the key to the next clue, but at the moment, all they can think about is Sebastian and the creepy evil spirits who has been captured their friend. What happens now? I have to go and read the next chapter. Love you lots, my very talented writer. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Of course, the drama builds...but it's Sebastian. How can I leave him to face the evil spirits alone? but then, he's not alone is he? Thanks for reading and enjoying....And more importantly, I am glad you are back.
Smiles, hugs, and love, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
Not a single thing to fix. No telling where this will end. I envy you your imagination. I am so enjoying your story. It keeps surprising me. Please save Sebastian! I am very attached to him! Esther
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Not a single thing to fix. No telling where this will end. I envy you your imagination. I am so enjoying your story. It keeps surprising me. Please save Sebastian! I am very attached to him! Esther
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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I am glad to hear that you are enjoying the story and that you have developed an attachment to Sebastian, just like my Esther. I appreciate your comments and review.
Smiles, Carol
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Write on and keep smiling my friend
Comment from Sally Law
I'm coming into this gripping tale late, but already sucked in. The opener: "the smell of butter and sugar filled the air!" Wicked writer, now I'm hungry!! Oh, back to the story while my gluten free blueberry muffin is heating. This is great stuff and I love the added thrill of fighting demonic forces. Gotta have Jesus and the angels of God to shut 'em down. I am looking forward to more. :))
In the absence of Karenina, I will be coming by to keep you company as much as possible. Keep up the good (great) work, my friend.
Sending you all my very best today as always.
Sal Xoxo's
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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I'm coming into this gripping tale late, but already sucked in. The opener: "the smell of butter and sugar filled the air!" Wicked writer, now I'm hungry!! Oh, back to the story while my gluten free blueberry muffin is heating. This is great stuff and I love the added thrill of fighting demonic forces. Gotta have Jesus and the angels of God to shut 'em down. I am looking forward to more. :))
In the absence of Karenina, I will be coming by to keep you company as much as possible. Keep up the good (great) work, my friend.
Sending you all my very best today as always.
Sal Xoxo's
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Thanks Sally....I am heartbroken. I don't know what I will do if I don't have a site with friends to write, but this one is going down hill fast and costing me tons of money. If know one reads, why be here. Take care and love you lots!
Hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
A dramatic post! I wonder if our daily spiritual battles are anything like this. I don't want to know but I'm thankful for the guardian angels around us. I have a feeling that Sebastian will be completely safe in God's protection.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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A dramatic post! I wonder if our daily spiritual battles are anything like this. I don't want to know but I'm thankful for the guardian angels around us. I have a feeling that Sebastian will be completely safe in God's protection.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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I am thankful as well for the guardian angels in my life and for our Lord who never leaves my side. I think Sebastian has the larger army on his side even if we can't see it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a terrifying scene as the evil ones try to prevent them for getting the letter and key out of the ballroom. Things do not look good for Sebastian. Can he escape? How will they proceed without him as he is the only one who seems to get them working together?
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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This is a terrifying scene as the evil ones try to prevent them for getting the letter and key out of the ballroom. Things do not look good for Sebastian. Can he escape? How will they proceed without him as he is the only one who seems to get them working together?
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Good morning, Carol... There is a swarm of evil lurking every where, but I believe with the Lord on his side, SEbastian will give it his best fight. Thanks for the wonderful review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Chapter begins with an art gallery heist.
From "I shall walk" to "comfort me" almost a direct quote from Psalm 23.
Baking "fresh pastries and a pot of hot coffee" a good use of sense of smell.
Plenty of action in the confrontation.
Seems "Sebastian" sacrificed to the demons.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Chapter begins with an art gallery heist.
From "I shall walk" to "comfort me" almost a direct quote from Psalm 23.
Baking "fresh pastries and a pot of hot coffee" a good use of sense of smell.
Plenty of action in the confrontation.
Seems "Sebastian" sacrificed to the demons.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Well, hello, Brett. Thank you so much for stopping by and reading one of my chapters in this story. You might call it a gallery heist, but actually, mortals and ghosts were searching for the clue to redemption with the demons hot on their trail. Sebastian's quote was meant to be similar to Psalm 23. I wouldn't count Sebastian out just yet!
Have a great day, and I hope you enjoyed my efforts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
My goodness - this was very vivid, and the sense of urgency and fear were both palpable! Surely they will be able to save Sebastian - or perhaps he will rise from death himself, by God's power over evil and death.
Great chapter. Well done.
Wendy
Edit spelling of Sebastian, in "Sebastion has only the power he was given and nothing more."
"This must be it!" she exclaims. (exclaimed) (as everything else is past tense)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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My goodness - this was very vivid, and the sense of urgency and fear were both palpable! Surely they will be able to save Sebastian - or perhaps he will rise from death himself, by God's power over evil and death.
Great chapter. Well done.
Wendy
Edit spelling of Sebastian, in "Sebastion has only the power he was given and nothing more."
"This must be it!" she exclaims. (exclaimed) (as everything else is past tense)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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He was sent to guide and that he did...Now I hope the powers from above will not leave him stranded at the mercy of the demons.
Thanks for catching my errors and for enjoying the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
This was dramatic, with evil spirits and demons howling. Where is Sebastian? I hope his faith keeps him safe. He did so much, holding the demons back to protect the group. Lorrie is right. They must go back. They wouldn't have their first possible clue if it had not been for Sebastian. I'll worry about what the first clue is later.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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This was dramatic, with evil spirits and demons howling. Where is Sebastian? I hope his faith keeps him safe. He did so much, holding the demons back to protect the group. Lorrie is right. They must go back. They wouldn't have their first possible clue if it had not been for Sebastian. I'll worry about what the first clue is later.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Sebastian was sent to guide and that's what he did. He protected them as long as he could and they accomplished their mission. As for Sebastian??? I pray the powers from above were watching.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
I hope you won't leave Sebastian to die in that room full of demons. Your story is getting exciting now. I'm anxiously awaiting the conclusion of this spooky story.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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I hope you won't leave Sebastian to die in that room full of demons. Your story is getting exciting now. I'm anxiously awaiting the conclusion of this spooky story.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Poor Sebastian! He was sent to guide the others toward their salvation, but unfortunately finds himself left to face the demons on his own. Will he have the strength or escape? We will see! Thanks as always.
Smiles, Carol