Cheery Mornings
Waking to bird song10 total reviews
Comment from Andrea Kepple
I immediately thought about late spring, in my childhood bedroom, when I would wake to the sounds of the birds singing in the maple tree a few feet from my bedroom window. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I immediately thought about late spring, in my childhood bedroom, when I would wake to the sounds of the birds singing in the maple tree a few feet from my bedroom window. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and well written haiku poem you have penned about a wonderful time of the year. I love when I wake up and hear the little birds singing and chirping. Great words and very lovely imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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This is a very beautiful and well written haiku poem you have penned about a wonderful time of the year. I love when I wake up and hear the little birds singing and chirping. Great words and very lovely imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you so much! It's one of the joys in life.
Comment from Wendy G
Those are the simple pleasures of life - the beautiful moments, and fortunate are we if we can experience them day by day. A lovely image to accompany your beautiful poem.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Those are the simple pleasures of life - the beautiful moments, and fortunate are we if we can experience them day by day. A lovely image to accompany your beautiful poem.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from royowen
Thank you for this five seven five poem. Oh yes indeed, I love sleeping through the night these days, at the moments it's winter, so we are enjoying the warmth of the bed, also we only have one small dog, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thank you for this five seven five poem. Oh yes indeed, I love sleeping through the night these days, at the moments it's winter, so we are enjoying the warmth of the bed, also we only have one small dog, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thanks so much!
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Welcome
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading your lovely 5-7-5 and the sounds it creates in my mind.
I love it too - the birdsong in the mornings. So cheerful, how could anyone have a bad day when they wake to that sound?Nancy
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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I enjoyed reading your lovely 5-7-5 and the sounds it creates in my mind.
I love it too - the birdsong in the mornings. So cheerful, how could anyone have a bad day when they wake to that sound?Nancy
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, it must be spring or the start of summer. I think of "open window time" as my version of "camping." Lol.
Enjoyed your lovely poem which gives us a feeling for the time of year and the sounds of spring. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Ah, it must be spring or the start of summer. I think of "open window time" as my version of "camping." Lol.
Enjoyed your lovely poem which gives us a feeling for the time of year and the sounds of spring. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This is a cute poem. The poem is bright and cheery and matches the picture. I like when you can open the windiws too and hear yhe birds chirping. Good luck in the contest. Very good writing.
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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This is a cute poem. The poem is bright and cheery and matches the picture. I like when you can open the windiws too and hear yhe birds chirping. Good luck in the contest. Very good writing.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. I adore Spring when the birds come back and I can awake to the sunlight and the singing birds outside my window. It always makes the day seem to start out in a better way. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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An excellent entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. I adore Spring when the birds come back and I can awake to the sunlight and the singing birds outside my window. It always makes the day seem to start out in a better way. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thanks so much!
Comment from zanya
A vignette painted in words here of the beauty of this time of year in late Spring and Summer is not far away -'bird song bright ' is such a joy in the month of May
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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A vignette painted in words here of the beauty of this time of year in late Spring and Summer is not far away -'bird song bright ' is such a joy in the month of May
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thanks so much!
Comment from RodG
There is nothing more pleasant than bird song in the morning and open windows to allow in fresh air. This may be picky criticism, but I think your short poem would be more successful without the rhyme. Rod
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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There is nothing more pleasant than bird song in the morning and open windows to allow in fresh air. This may be picky criticism, but I think your short poem would be more successful without the rhyme. Rod
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Thank you for your review and insight. I'll take another look.
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I switched it and I think you're right--thanks!
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I read the revision and internal rhyme works better.
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Thanks again!