I told her after all these years
Letting a friend know she is beautiful3 total reviews
Comment from Esther Brown
Interesting how someone from long ago can still hold a tiny piece of a joyful memory. I am glad you told her how beautiful she was to you in the past. I would like a shorter version of the bus trips and school without dates. Couple fixes: plan should be "plant", them should be "then", and used relationships twice in a row. I would love more about her personally. Did she seem to know who you were? Was she popular with other kids? Did she have a boyfriend? Smart? Why did you like her besides her beauty? Esther
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Interesting how someone from long ago can still hold a tiny piece of a joyful memory. I am glad you told her how beautiful she was to you in the past. I would like a shorter version of the bus trips and school without dates. Couple fixes: plan should be "plant", them should be "then", and used relationships twice in a row. I would love more about her personally. Did she seem to know who you were? Was she popular with other kids? Did she have a boyfriend? Smart? Why did you like her besides her beauty? Esther
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Thank you. I can see your points and recommendations. I will make a few tweaks to the effort soon.
Comment from Julekha1
Ur short story made me travel across all those years in a scenic location. I felt good as how you took it back in the past and then completed by letting know what you had to tell. It was pretty short story but I liked the flow of it. Keep up the good work. You can make it even more interesting I am sure
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Ur short story made me travel across all those years in a scenic location. I felt good as how you took it back in the past and then completed by letting know what you had to tell. It was pretty short story but I liked the flow of it. Keep up the good work. You can make it even more interesting I am sure
Comment Written 12-May-2024
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Thank you for these comments. I don't really have juicier details to lend to this but it is good memory which began in my mid-teen years.
Comment from Barry Penfold
A cute and touching story. I wonder how many people have wanted to catch up with someone and tell them how much they meant to you in earlier days. In my opinion there would be lots.
Thanks for sharing. Take care and have a good day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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A cute and touching story. I wonder how many people have wanted to catch up with someone and tell them how much they meant to you in earlier days. In my opinion there would be lots.
Thanks for sharing. Take care and have a good day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 12-May-2024
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Thank you so very much!!!!!!