Love is in the Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Seismic"Love poems and sweet nothings
7 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
This was a great four line poem. It's wonderful that something as innocent as holding hands can shift the earth. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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This was a great four line poem. It's wonderful that something as innocent as holding hands can shift the earth. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Jessi.
Comment from Wendy G
Beautiful one!, this states subtly how important you sensed this relationship would become. I enjoyed the earthquake imagery a lot. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Beautiful one!, this states subtly how important you sensed this relationship would become. I enjoyed the earthquake imagery a lot. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Wendy.
Comment from Carol Clark2
Awww, what a sweet memory! I like the picture, and it's perfect for your words. I'm glad you entered this in the four-line poem contest, as well as your book. Hope it does well. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Awww, what a sweet memory! I like the picture, and it's perfect for your words. I'm glad you entered this in the four-line poem contest, as well as your book. Hope it does well. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Carol.
Comment from lyenochka
It sounds like the addressee was the one for this poet! It reminds me of the Carole King song "I feel the earth move under my feet..." Best wishes in the contest!
One suggestion:
before the earth shifted beneath my feet. (remove "the" or reduce the syllable count some other way to make it 9 syllables)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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It sounds like the addressee was the one for this poet! It reminds me of the Carole King song "I feel the earth move under my feet..." Best wishes in the contest!
One suggestion:
before the earth shifted beneath my feet. (remove "the" or reduce the syllable count some other way to make it 9 syllables)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much for catching the extra syllable. I have made the correction.
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is so beautifully written. I like the earth shifting analogy. It adds strength and shows the tremendous impact she get from the first handshake. Nicely portrayed
Good luck in the Four Line Poetry Contest.
D
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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This is so beautifully written. I like the earth shifting analogy. It adds strength and shows the tremendous impact she get from the first handshake. Nicely portrayed
Good luck in the Four Line Poetry Contest.
D
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Doug.
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I know people want fixes and corrections, but I saw nothing wrong here. Perfect.
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I know people want fixes and corrections, but I saw nothing wrong here. Perfect.
Comment from papa55mike
Feeling the power of love with just a touch is very special. It's what happens next. What a wonderfully written poem that captures this feeling. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Feeling the power of love with just a touch is very special. It's what happens next. What a wonderfully written poem that captures this feeling. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Mike.
Comment from Sally Law
This is fantastic, my friend, and in a most difficult form too. I felt the same about my husband. Still do. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal Xos
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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This is fantastic, my friend, and in a most difficult form too. I felt the same about my husband. Still do. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal Xos
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Sally, we must be cut from the same fabric, as they say. You always seem to understand the deeper meaning behind my poems. Thank you.
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My pleasure! A blessing to read this! Not many have this kind of love anymore. Blessings to you both.
Sal Xoxo