Air
Go ahead and breathe outside.2 total reviews
Comment from Frank Malley
This 3-5-3 poem has a beautiful cloud photo above it. The poem itself, while proposing a wonderful experience to the reader, does not capture the joy or sensation of a deep breath. Blissful is a beautiful word that has been wrung out so continually that it always sounds tired and boring, even though it speaks of something wonderful.
3-5-3 poetry and its syllabic ilk are often so severely cobbled by their limitations that it's really difficult to say anything breathtaking - which is, in some sense, the object of poetry. The 5 is more for the idea and the pic, and not the poem.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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This 3-5-3 poem has a beautiful cloud photo above it. The poem itself, while proposing a wonderful experience to the reader, does not capture the joy or sensation of a deep breath. Blissful is a beautiful word that has been wrung out so continually that it always sounds tired and boring, even though it speaks of something wonderful.
3-5-3 poetry and its syllabic ilk are often so severely cobbled by their limitations that it's really difficult to say anything breathtaking - which is, in some sense, the object of poetry. The 5 is more for the idea and the pic, and not the poem.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 3-5-3 poem for the contest
with very good description of the feeling of the air
so important to life.
Good choice of picture to match.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
PS It posted twice.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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This is an excellent 3-5-3 poem for the contest
with very good description of the feeling of the air
so important to life.
Good choice of picture to match.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
PS It posted twice.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much!
