The Unwilling Heir
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Unwilling Heir - Chap 5"A Mysterious Inheritance and Murders
15 total reviews
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. Again, you are moving the story along nicely. I am getting drawn in with all the intrigue. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. Again, you are moving the story along nicely. I am getting drawn in with all the intrigue. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Hope your days are going well too! It's a bit chilly this morning and the girls are sleeping in. Quick time to answer the reviews and say hello.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, this is a terrific story, but I will be honest with you. I really do need to catch up. I have been so busy with friends of late, meeting up for meals and such. Typical Spanish get together. Now to catching up. Hugs, Ulla,xcx
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2024
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Hi Carol, this is a terrific story, but I will be honest with you. I really do need to catch up. I have been so busy with friends of late, meeting up for meals and such. Typical Spanish get together. Now to catching up. Hugs, Ulla,xcx
Comment Written 31-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2024
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I'm thrilled you are having fun with friends...that's how it should be. I am in North Carolina with my granddaughter and her three girls. She rented a condo on the beach. It's awesome! I'm in heaven sitting outside reading your review and listening to the waves. Thanks so much, Ulla.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
That was a fun read. The boyfriend of Madeline in the police uniform was a new guy to suspect cause she would have recognized the cemetery man. So now we have 2 of the gang supposed to be murdered: Judge and Detective. Esther
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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That was a fun read. The boyfriend of Madeline in the police uniform was a new guy to suspect cause she would have recognized the cemetery man. So now we have 2 of the gang supposed to be murdered: Judge and Detective. Esther
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Are you reading the story backwards? lol James was the guy at the cemetery. The boy guessing her is the Sheriff. The two ghosts you are referring to are Detective Ryan Hamilton and Judge William Parker.
Smiles, Carol
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Yep. You caught me reading backwards. I was scrolling through your portfolio from the bottom upwards reading what caught my eye. Same way I read magazines. Fortunately I read books all in one go if they are interesting to me, and you are a fine writer. Didn't have a chance to read things this week much so sorry if I confused you by my review and reading backwards. Esther
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Not a problem.... I am on vacation with my great granddaughters so I have been on a hit or miss schedule myself. And this story is not my usual style. Thanks for reading.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Okay, you have me hooked on this story. I love it. I enjoy stories about anything supernatural, and this story meets that criteria. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Okay, you have me hooked on this story. I love it. I enjoy stories about anything supernatural, and this story meets that criteria. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Supernatural it is! I've never written about ghosts so if I get something wrong please let me know. This is totally different for me. It's a mystery and crime but a patch of ghosts have been thrown into the mix.
Have a nice Easter ..... an a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
We're into Chapter 5 and the plot continues to thicken. Sandra has a lot of unanswered questions. The judge and the detective are dead, and may be ghosts. We haven't heard about Benny yet, and I wonder about James. I hope he's real. I remember Lorrie came out of the bushes at the cemetery, so I'm not sure about her. Sandra has her questions, and I have mine. I look forward to answers as the story continues.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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We're into Chapter 5 and the plot continues to thicken. Sandra has a lot of unanswered questions. The judge and the detective are dead, and may be ghosts. We haven't heard about Benny yet, and I wonder about James. I hope he's real. I remember Lorrie came out of the bushes at the cemetery, so I'm not sure about her. Sandra has her questions, and I have mine. I look forward to answers as the story continues.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Good morning, Lorraine!
Guessing is a good thing! Dear sweet Lorrie has a few secrets of her own too! I think I will start to reveal who they are in the upcoming chapters so things can start to unravel and be solved. Glad you are enjoying. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
Oh! Well this story is haunting!
(Sorry, I couldn't help myself)
Ghosts are popping up and that hussy Madeline hasn't a clue about keeping a low profile...
You're in your groove, Sandra's on the move and I know there's lots more to come!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Oh! Well this story is haunting!
(Sorry, I couldn't help myself)
Ghosts are popping up and that hussy Madeline hasn't a clue about keeping a low profile...
You're in your groove, Sandra's on the move and I know there's lots more to come!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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I hope I get a chance to write a chapter or two this weekend but I don't know with the girls...they like me to cook so they can eat...I'm enjoying myself though so all is good. Two more days and the contest ends. Fingers crossed.
HAPPY EASTER AND ENJOY THE WEEKEND.
Love ya, Carol
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Love up on the girls! R & R is just what you need! Nothing wrong with this world that a little grandma lovin' can't heal!
Happy Easter to YOU also!
Comment from Wendy G
So Ryan Hamilton is also dead - came to an untimely end as well. Now the plot thickens. Madeline is obviously up to no good, and James knows more than he is willing to share. Can't quite figure him out yet. Well written chapter, full of intrigue and it poses plenty of questions!
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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So Ryan Hamilton is also dead - came to an untimely end as well. Now the plot thickens. Madeline is obviously up to no good, and James knows more than he is willing to share. Can't quite figure him out yet. Well written chapter, full of intrigue and it poses plenty of questions!
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Another chapter or two and it should (I HOPE) become clear as to what Sandra's part is in all this mayhem. Glad you continued to follow the story.
HAPPY EASTER AND ENJOY THE WEEKEND.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This chapter is a good one as she discovers another of the men she met the day of the funeral is also dead, by violence. And the wife certainly isn't a sorrowful widow, except for not inheriting the estate.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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This chapter is a good one as she discovers another of the men she met the day of the funeral is also dead, by violence. And the wife certainly isn't a sorrowful widow, except for not inheriting the estate.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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It will soon show what is what and why Sandra has been called to the mansion. I hope it keeps your interest up.
Happy Easter......Enjoy the weekend.
Smiles, Carol
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I hope you are off enjoying the beach. Happy Easter to you also.
Comment from Julie Helms
Wow, a lot of mysteries. I can't wait to find out what this treasure is!
(Put a paragraph break when Sandra begins speaking):
James raised his left eyebrow, followed by a slight frown. "So much for tabling the questions," he said.
"Sorry, I'm just trying to understand what's going on.
(In the following, I would identify Sandra as the speaker. James just left the room so I thought he was the one headed to town.)
James stood and left the room without another word. Sandra watched him leave while her thoughts went wild.
*****
"Lorrie, I need some air. I think I'll drive into town.
Julie
:-)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Wow, a lot of mysteries. I can't wait to find out what this treasure is!
(Put a paragraph break when Sandra begins speaking):
James raised his left eyebrow, followed by a slight frown. "So much for tabling the questions," he said.
"Sorry, I'm just trying to understand what's going on.
(In the following, I would identify Sandra as the speaker. James just left the room so I thought he was the one headed to town.)
James stood and left the room without another word. Sandra watched him leave while her thoughts went wild.
*****
"Lorrie, I need some air. I think I'll drive into town.
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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sorry it took me awhile to get back to you. I was traveling and now the great granddaughters are keeping me busy....or else they want my laptop for games. lol Thanks so much for helping out as always.
Take care and have a great weekend. HAPPY EASTER
Smiles, Carol
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Happy Easter, Carol! Have a fantastic time with the great grands!
Comment from royowen
So things aren't what they appear to, be, with Madeline planting a great big smackeroo on a young officer, what's going on? Did Noah did from an illness, or was he murdered? Mmmmh, well done Carol, happy Easter, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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So things aren't what they appear to, be, with Madeline planting a great big smackeroo on a young officer, what's going on? Did Noah did from an illness, or was he murdered? Mmmmh, well done Carol, happy Easter, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Happy Easter to you, Roy.
Thanks for sticking with me and I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Smiles, Carol