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What We See

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A wrongly accused teacher reinvents his life

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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Wish I had a six left. I love these stories. I am behind, as I only read those who read me. Sometimes folks have to go to my site to find stories, as I write a lot of blind ones that do not go to your mailbox. And if you write more than me you might have to read old ones. I will keep reading you. Karen

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
    Thanks very much, Karen. I appreciate the virtual 6. I'll have to check out some of your blind ones.
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 12-Apr-2024
    Thank you. Karen
Comment from tfawcus
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There's a lot going on in this chapter. I liked the way Alan helped to break the ice between Carrie and Tommy in the car going to the dance. It seems that everyone is in a good place at the moment. Writing about a computer lesson could easily have got bogged down. I thought you had just the right level of detail.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
    Thanks very much, Tony. I appreciate your comment about the challenge of narrating an introductory computer lesson.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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I really enjoyed the paragraphs as Tommy and Callie go to the dance. The nervousness of the young teens came across well Jim. You lost me a bit with the Basic computer class, but I always did hate school. �
A good chapter Jim but I am thinking things are going a bit too smoothly.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
    Thanks, Valda. Very good instincts. This new character will definitely shake things up a bit.
Comment from lancellot
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This is nicely written, and it is a nice chapter, with nice characters, and the scenes were also nice. The relationship between Ginnie and Alan (now a boyfriend, officially) is going nicely. That Tommy introduced Alan, only as his neighbor was odd.


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
    What a nice guy you are, Lance. Thanks for the nice review. This is the calm before the storm, the beginnings of which take place shortly. A little bit more niceness, then we begin with the struggles which will occupy much of Part 2.
Comment from eliz100
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This is another excellent chapter. I smiled while reading the dance scene. Your character knows how to teach individually and in a class, but of course, he is a teacher. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
    Thanks, Lee. I used my own experience with those junior high dances where everyone looked like a spazz doing the fast dances. There were never enough slow dances!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This sounds a little like a class I took a long time ago hoping I would understand computers better. I didn't. The kids seem to have no trouble with it. They also seem to be the right kids to work together for the class. Life is good for Alan.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
    Tommy and Alan do seem to have chosen the right kids for the class. This class will serve to reawaken Alan's love for teaching which he hopes to get back to someday.
Comment from royowen
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Things seem to be settling down very quickly with Allen and Ginnie, and who knows where it lead, as if I didn't know, and now Tommy is sweet on a bright new young girl called Callie, while Allen is teaching basic computer skills, well done Jim, good story line. Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
    Thanks very much, Roy. I'm just hoping it all fits together well, as there is a lot going on. The main purpose of the computer classes is to reawaken Alan's love for teaching which he's been thinking about doing at the college level some day. He's also a man without any kind of family anymore but seems to really thrive on family life.
reply by royowen on 28-Mar-2024
    I figured that
Comment from LJbutterfly
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I enjoyed the realistic descriptions of Tommy and Callie in the car on the way to the dance and the difference in their demeanor in the car after the dance. Both you and Tommy now have girlfriends.

You reminded me of my Introduction to Computer Programming class which was a beginning requirement course for my Business Management Degree many, many years ago. The one course was interesting, but I didn't want any more. This was an entertaining and enjoyable chapter.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
    Thanks so much, Lorraine. I'm amazed at how many of the readers took a computer class back in the day. Most of them hated it, but I'm glad you found it interesting. I hated my first computer class too, but that was mainly due to the teacher. I must have found it interesting enough, because 7 years later, I began a track that led to my eventual profession.
Comment from Wendy G
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A lovely chapter, and Alan is a good teacher with a great understanding of kids. He explains simply and well. Even I managed to learn a few things about computer programming. I hope there won't be any more dramas for Alan as he is in a good place right now. Well written.
Wendy

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
    Thank you, Wendy. Now what kind of story would we have if the rest of it is clear sailing for Alan? Don't get comfortable for too long!
reply by Wendy G on 28-Mar-2024
    That's what I was afraid you would say ... I knew it!!
Comment from lyenochka
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Yes! If only all teaching could be like that! You said it! And of course, these young geniuses will learn a valuable skill long before any of their peers. I liked how Tommy and Callie had fun with misheard words that probably put Tommy at ease. And I liked how you covered the basics of BASIC. That was easier that COBOL. If I remember it from 40 years ago...
100 DO UNTIL
200 FINISH REMAINING CHAPTERS
300 ENDDO

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2024


reply by the author on 27-Mar-2024
    Wow, I'm impressed, Helen. Several of my readers took COBOL or Fortran or BASIC back in the day. COBOL was the language used during much of my career in IT, but toward the end we got into the sort of languages used for web pages like Visual Basic.

    The first computer class I ever took was Fortran as an elective when I was studying landscape architecture. I hated that class because the teacher was really bad. It's quite amazing I ended up after that start with IT being my career in another 7 years after a few miscues in a different direction.
reply by lyenochka on 27-Mar-2024
    I never took Fortran but used PL/1 which had a more robust text handling ability. Mostly I used Nomad and DB2 to create reports for customers. It's fun to learn our computer literate friends here.