Magpie's Mission
Sedoka Poem8 total reviews
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a well-crafted poem. I have heard of birds protecting their nest. They are relentless protectors. Your 5-7-7 syllable count is in good order for this writing prompt. Good accentuating picture. Nice job.
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This is a well-crafted poem. I have heard of birds protecting their nest. They are relentless protectors. Your 5-7-7 syllable count is in good order for this writing prompt. Good accentuating picture. Nice job.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, I have been an unwitting victim of these attacks, when riding my bike in an unfamiliar area. I enjoyed your poem, and the accompanying photo. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
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Yes, I have been an unwitting victim of these attacks, when riding my bike in an unfamiliar area. I enjoyed your poem, and the accompanying photo. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Birds will let people know they are not welcome when they have little ones. They will swoop when they fly over a person's head. Blackbirds are terrible at squawking.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Birds will let people know they are not welcome when they have little ones. They will swoop when they fly over a person's head. Blackbirds are terrible at squawking.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review. Magpies have been known to take out a person's eye if they get too close
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought your "mindless humans" line was terrific. This is a funny poem especially with the picture. But it also does a wonderful job of painting a picture of the angry mother bird protecting her nest!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I thought your "mindless humans" line was terrific. This is a funny poem especially with the picture. But it also does a wonderful job of painting a picture of the angry mother bird protecting her nest!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review. It is not funny when a magpie makes a kamikaze dive for your head. Those birds can take your eye out
Comment from s.m.kirby
Yep, momma on a mission. it is her job to protect her babies. I like the picture you choose to go with it. nice job. Good luck in the contest. I hope you have a good day.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Yep, momma on a mission. it is her job to protect her babies. I like the picture you choose to go with it. nice job. Good luck in the contest. I hope you have a good day.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review. It is dangerous to be outside during magpie mating season
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You're welcome
Comment from Sally Law
Wonderfully written sedoka poem for the contest. I think modern society needs to pay closer attention to animal life, especially the mother's protective instincts. The womb and the children are our posterity.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes in the sedoka poetry contest.
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Wonderfully written sedoka poem for the contest. I think modern society needs to pay closer attention to animal life, especially the mother's protective instincts. The womb and the children are our posterity.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes in the sedoka poetry contest.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review. Those birds are not a fan of people during mating season.
Comment from jessizero
I think your third line is only five syllables when it should be seven. Other than that, I really liked your poem. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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I think your third line is only five syllables when it should be seven. Other than that, I really liked your poem. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review. The last line is "It is this magpie's mission." I think you'll find that's seven syllables.
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I was talking about "Humans shall not pass." I'm pretty sure it's five. Not trying to bug you. Sorry.
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A big whoops and thank you from me. Now fixed.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent example of a Sedoka poem for the the writing prompt. the descriptive verses, the photograph and the black and white background and text all add together to make this a delightful entry. Good luck.
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An excellent example of a Sedoka poem for the the writing prompt. the descriptive verses, the photograph and the black and white background and text all add together to make this a delightful entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024