What We See
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, I enjoyed this chapter and it's very well written. I will also admit that I know next to nothing about the game so much of this chapter went straight over my head. But I got the gist of it all. A bond is starting to form. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Hi Jim, I enjoyed this chapter and it's very well written. I will also admit that I know next to nothing about the game so much of this chapter went straight over my head. But I got the gist of it all. A bond is starting to form. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Ulla. Yeah, the gist is all that's important really. This was just a fun chapter that showed the three of them bonding and even including Tommy's friend Artie, who isn't such a bad guy after all.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I enjoyed the detail and descriptions of this chapter. I'm glad Alan was able to attend the game and cheer Tommy on. Tommy probably played better because Alan was watching. I felt bad for Archie, but he proved to be a good friend. Ice cream for all at the end was perfect. So was practice the next day, with four friends.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed the detail and descriptions of this chapter. I'm glad Alan was able to attend the game and cheer Tommy on. Tommy probably played better because Alan was watching. I felt bad for Archie, but he proved to be a good friend. Ice cream for all at the end was perfect. So was practice the next day, with four friends.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Lorraine. This was a feel-good chapter after all the drama of the last few.
Comment from royowen
This is an interesting switch from the normal storyline dominated by Alan, it took me back to those fun days when I was sportmad, playing Footie in the winter and cricket in the summer. Beautifully written, I forgot about those character building days, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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This is an interesting switch from the normal storyline dominated by Alan, it took me back to those fun days when I was sportmad, playing Footie in the winter and cricket in the summer. Beautifully written, I forgot about those character building days, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Roy. I thought you might have enjoyed this one. Are you at all familiar with baseball? Most of the other Aussies who review were not.
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No I am familiar, we have baseball leagues, our local team are national champions, you have Aussie players there. players, but I?ll bet you guys don?t understand cricket, or Aussie football, we play softball too.
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Nor rugby either, sorry to say.
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There you go
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Jim,
It was kind of nice to not have anyone facing gut wrenching trauma. Now and then everything goes exactly as planned, and we have a tendency to remember those times, but they are few and far between usually. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Hello Jim,
It was kind of nice to not have anyone facing gut wrenching trauma. Now and then everything goes exactly as planned, and we have a tendency to remember those times, but they are few and far between usually. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Tom.
Yeah, I thought we were due for a break from all that trauma. We'll enjoy things for a while before we get to the next part of the story.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was a great part of the story. Artie proves to be a better kid than Alan thought. Somehow Tommy already knew what depths Artie had because he claimed his as a friend.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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This was a great part of the story. Artie proves to be a better kid than Alan thought. Somehow Tommy already knew what depths Artie had because he claimed his as a friend.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Carol. So glad you enjoyed this chapter. This was a fun one to write after all that drama.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm glad David/Alan made it to the game, and they all realized Archie is really a pretty good guy. My only observation and you can do with it what you want, I raised four boys, they all played football, baseball, basketball, and one of them wrestled. When they got old enough to be in sports, I was told under no circumstances was a mom allowed on the field. They stated it was in 'The Mother's Handbook' that I was given at birth of my first son. I mentioned I never received it. I was then told it wasn't their fault I lost it. LOL Anyway, when Ginnie went out on the field, that hit me.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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I'm glad David/Alan made it to the game, and they all realized Archie is really a pretty good guy. My only observation and you can do with it what you want, I raised four boys, they all played football, baseball, basketball, and one of them wrestled. When they got old enough to be in sports, I was told under no circumstances was a mom allowed on the field. They stated it was in 'The Mother's Handbook' that I was given at birth of my first son. I mentioned I never received it. I was then told it wasn't their fault I lost it. LOL Anyway, when Ginnie went out on the field, that hit me.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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That's funny, Barbara! So, were you the only girl in your family. That was the case with my mom. A husband and three boys. Even the dogs were males. I think she kind of liked it.
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I made sure when the boys were little, I had female dogs, but later on it ended up male dogs and cats. Now all my boys have daughters, one has a couple boys.
Comment from Kaiku
pretty clean chapter, making me wonder what might be next. I couldn't get a sense of a new direction you might have in store for the characters. The ice cream served here was somewhat vanilla. Is that too harsh?
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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pretty clean chapter, making me wonder what might be next. I couldn't get a sense of a new direction you might have in store for the characters. The ice cream served here was somewhat vanilla. Is that too harsh?
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Vanilla? Ginnie had mint chocolate chip, Alan had moose tracks, Artie probably ordered a banana split, and Tommy had chocolate. No one had vanilla to my knowledge (though I may have had I been there!)
Yeah, we'll shortly be onto some new things here, and pretty soon, we might meet an old friend.
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mint chocolate chip is one of my favorites.
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My wife's too. I can take it or leave it.
Comment from BethShelby
Nice story about the bonding going on at the baceball game. David and Ginnie are getting along well and David is already a good with Tommy. It was interesting to read. I'm looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Nice story about the bonding going on at the baceball game. David and Ginnie are getting along well and David is already a good with Tommy. It was interesting to read. I'm looking forward to more.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Beth. I figured we needed a little break from all the drama.
Comment from jmdg1954
Yupper... spring training is in full swing; baseball is in the air once again. I enjoyed your chapter for a few reasons -
1- it was about baseball
2- you were able to bring back the fingers-in-the-mouth whistle like you wrote about some months ago
3- Artie, a big kid would pick on Tommy but is really a friend and I liked how he stuck up for Tommy.
I was a bit confused how Artie was going to spike the 3rd baseman running without a slide : came around second and headed for third, going a little out of his way to spike the third baseman before he rounded third at full speed and barreled for home... did he purposely step on him? Just my observation.
Good chapter, Jim. Enjoyed it.
John
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Yupper... spring training is in full swing; baseball is in the air once again. I enjoyed your chapter for a few reasons -
1- it was about baseball
2- you were able to bring back the fingers-in-the-mouth whistle like you wrote about some months ago
3- Artie, a big kid would pick on Tommy but is really a friend and I liked how he stuck up for Tommy.
I was a bit confused how Artie was going to spike the 3rd baseman running without a slide : came around second and headed for third, going a little out of his way to spike the third baseman before he rounded third at full speed and barreled for home... did he purposely step on him? Just my observation.
Good chapter, Jim. Enjoyed it.
John
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thanks, John. I thought you would appreciate this one.
Maybe spike isn't the right word here. I only meant he would step on his foot with his spikes, but your use of the word is actually correct.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a real feel-good chapter, after all the earlier tensions, characterised by a cementing of relationships through sport (I don't understand the game but that doesn't matter:)) Also we see more confidence growing in Tommy, not least in his comedic ownership of his dyslexic quirks. After all, that's how comics often get started and become so appealing. An excellent chapter, Jim. No edits noted. Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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This is a real feel-good chapter, after all the earlier tensions, characterised by a cementing of relationships through sport (I don't understand the game but that doesn't matter:)) Also we see more confidence growing in Tommy, not least in his comedic ownership of his dyslexic quirks. After all, that's how comics often get started and become so appealing. An excellent chapter, Jim. No edits noted. Debbie
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much, Debbie. I always enjoy your perceptive reviews. Hopefully this chapter was a welcome break from the past few heavy ones.