Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Hello Mystery Writer! This theme rings a bit of a bell for me! I actually like rats but not in large number so your image is definitely quite scary! As is your quite gruesome verse. Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024

Thank you! I hope I win!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A terrifying poem and the thought of even seeing a rat is frightening and reading your poem is indeed a horror story.

Just one suggestion for this line:
(and (feed) on the cooks, waiters, and waitresses)

Love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024

It's fixed. Thank you for your help!

Comment from Baltimore Born

Excellent

This is definitely horrific. This story definitely qualifies for this contest. I under 100 words you managed to terrify. The story reads well. It paints the mental picture of rats eating everything and everybody. However, "Rats go inside the place and by their magic mind they lock doors" was shocking. Nice job.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024

Thank you! I have changed it to poetry. You can read it again, as you wish.

reply by Baltimore Born on 17-Feb-2024

You are welcome.