Comment from Mark Schardine

Excellent

The ocean can be literal or metaphorical, but the separation is all too real, and the sorrow will not go away. We can even imagine being forgotten, with no hope to see the other person.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024

Thank you very much, Mark.

Gypsy

Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

Long distance relationships are the absolute worst. I have never, not once, know one to work.

Great poem about such endeavors and great anguishing picture.

Most enjoyable,
Douglas

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024

I met my exhusband online. We were pen pals for a year, dated in person for two years and got married. We had 7 happy years and then he left me for a married coworker. It was very painful.

Thank you, Douglas (*÷*)

Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Hi Gypsy,
I always enjoy reading your beautiful words and seeing th fabulous images and colours you chose...
Thank you for brightening my day!!!
Lisa............................

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

reply by Lisasview on 18-Feb-2024

You are so welcome Gypsy,
Lisa

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Yep, being an ocean apart does put a cramp in romance. Your poem is filled with longing. I can feel the emotion. Thank you for sharing not only your poetic talent with us, but your presentation talent with us. It's artistic.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Many people do feel like an ocean is between them when they are writing a romantic poem long distance. Like your words, it brings a little romance to the story.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Baltimore Born

Excellent

Very good Tanka poem. Your words are expressive and speaks of strong desire. Your notes helped me with this poem and what Tanka is. The poem reads and flows well. Your picture compliments the poem. Nice job.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

reply by Baltimore Born on 17-Feb-2024

You are welcome.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great way to structure your tanka which pivots from the ocean distance with the warm summer night to the heart that is aflame with love and yearning for the absent beloved.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024

Yes, you got it. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Love
Marival

Comment from Mike Stevens

Excellent

Another fine poem Gypsy....my oh my is this babe smoking. Someone should tell her, "heh, fire lady, control your emotions, control yourself!" Well, by someone I mean not me

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024

LoL

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This poem had all the elements of star crossed lovers. The distance between them, the thoughts of love and the feel of passion. Beautifully displayed. Gretchen

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

there's nothing like unrequited love to make a poem
great word choices and imagery - smooth flow and connection

thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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 Comment Written 16-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs