Was It Murder?
A Lover's plans abruptly halted11 total reviews
Comment from Jeano
Poor Benny got put on pause by a scarecrow? Or was it a scarecrow. Good story of bad intentions shrouded with mystery. Good job. Good luck with this competition.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Poor Benny got put on pause by a scarecrow? Or was it a scarecrow. Good story of bad intentions shrouded with mystery. Good job. Good luck with this competition.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on this bit of flash fiction. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day!
Comment from Julie Helms
Now there's a guy with a one-track mind. This fits nicely in the genre of creepy things happening while sneaking off on a date. Lovers Lane horror. Good story told quickly. Best of luck in the contest! Julie
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Now there's a guy with a one-track mind. This fits nicely in the genre of creepy things happening while sneaking off on a date. Lovers Lane horror. Good story told quickly. Best of luck in the contest! Julie
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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100 Words is about as far as my humor and sexy dates can go. I prefer the drama... because I've got a lot of it to deal with. LOL Thank you so much. Have a great day!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done.
A night to remember for sure. But I'm not sure a story is told without benefit of the artwork.
Benny snarled. - Hard to get back in the mood after a snarl, let alone with a corpse swinging overhead.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Well done.
A night to remember for sure. But I'm not sure a story is told without benefit of the artwork.
Benny snarled. - Hard to get back in the mood after a snarl, let alone with a corpse swinging overhead.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Wayne, for stopping by to read and review my silly story. Guess I must have been in a dark spot...Lucky for me, I wrote another one filled with beauty and magic.
Have a great day!
Comment from Wendy G
I think that even if it was a scarecrow hanging in the tree, that would be enough to put a dampener on the ardor planned for the evening. Lol. Good wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I think that even if it was a scarecrow hanging in the tree, that would be enough to put a dampener on the ardor planned for the evening. Lol. Good wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a review. I appreciate your time and suggestions.
Have a great day.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
That is a clever twist. Excellent writing for the challenge. The imagery and authentic dialogue made this fun to read. Thank you for sharing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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That is a clever twist. Excellent writing for the challenge. The imagery and authentic dialogue made this fun to read. Thank you for sharing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a review. I appreciate your time and suggestions.
Have a great day.
Comment from sherrygreywolf
I loved the first paragraph of your dash, "The farm truck's dirty lights provided ambiance. The stars, a cooler, a blanket, and Sara made it perfect." Your words painted a nice picture for the reader. Your word count is correct and the conflict between the two characters was clear. Unfortunately, I really didn't feel that there was a resolution. The story just ended in the middle. Most scarecrows don't dangle from trees, so the reader is left wondering whether it is actually a body or a scarecrow as your horny hero claims. Also, though technically it is not part of the story, you misspelled "halted".
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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I loved the first paragraph of your dash, "The farm truck's dirty lights provided ambiance. The stars, a cooler, a blanket, and Sara made it perfect." Your words painted a nice picture for the reader. Your word count is correct and the conflict between the two characters was clear. Unfortunately, I really didn't feel that there was a resolution. The story just ended in the middle. Most scarecrows don't dangle from trees, so the reader is left wondering whether it is actually a body or a scarecrow as your horny hero claims. Also, though technically it is not part of the story, you misspelled "halted".
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a review. I appreciate your time and suggestions.
Have a great day.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This short story met the basic requirements of a main character, setting, conflict and resolution. Your story is well written with descriptive narrative and realistic dialogue. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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This short story met the basic requirements of a main character, setting, conflict and resolution. Your story is well written with descriptive narrative and realistic dialogue. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Thank you. Lorraine for reading and leaving your thoughtful comments. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This was humorous. It is very imaginative. The oicture goes with the words nicely. When I started reading this. It sure ended different than I thought it would. A good twist. Very good job
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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This was humorous. It is very imaginative. The oicture goes with the words nicely. When I started reading this. It sure ended different than I thought it would. A good twist. Very good job
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Good day to you, Brenda. I'm so happy you found enjoyment in this bit of fiction. I'm glad you were surprised by the ending. Thank you for the kind review.
Have a great day!
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I like reading your posts.
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Very much appreciated!
Comment from Ric Myworld
ROFL! Thanks for sharing your outstanding flash story of so few words. You have me all suckered in to believing something horrible was about to happen . . . and it did, his got scared and pulled away. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a very deserved six.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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ROFL! Thanks for sharing your outstanding flash story of so few words. You have me all suckered in to believing something horrible was about to happen . . . and it did, his got scared and pulled away. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a very deserved six.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Your thoughtfulness far exceeds the stars. I'm thrilled you enjoyed this nonsense. Laughter is good! Have a great day!
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a well-written story. This story reads and flows well. Your 100-word count is met for this contest. The abruptness of the scene was timed perfectly in this story. Good resolution to the ending of this story.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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This is a well-written story. This story reads and flows well. Your 100-word count is met for this contest. The abruptness of the scene was timed perfectly in this story. Good resolution to the ending of this story.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate your kindness and thoughts. Have a great day!
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You are welcome.