Darkness Inside and Out
It's been one of those days8 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
darkness comes when we least expect it
if a person dies, the darkness comes too soon, too fast
if people lie, there is constant darkness, they live in a dark world of no truthfulness
are we walking blindly where there is no light?
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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darkness comes when we least expect it
if a person dies, the darkness comes too soon, too fast
if people lie, there is constant darkness, they live in a dark world of no truthfulness
are we walking blindly where there is no light?
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Rosemary; both for the review and the wise words
Comment from QC Poet
I have given you a six star rating because I'm very familiar with the pick ups and down falls a living life throws our way and it is captured moping your writing. Over the years I've learned that you have to dust off the best you can and start again. Thank you for Sharing your poem.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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I have given you a six star rating because I'm very familiar with the pick ups and down falls a living life throws our way and it is captured moping your writing. Over the years I've learned that you have to dust off the best you can and start again. Thank you for Sharing your poem.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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A six star rating thank you. Also thank you so much for both the review and the hinted concern The poem was a reflection of these times I'm ok.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This excellent free verse, rather than focus on colour, explores on a much deeper level, the emotions of melancholy or depression. But it also evolves from the darkness into the dawn of the day offering hope to overcome and move on. I enjoyed that transition. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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This excellent free verse, rather than focus on colour, explores on a much deeper level, the emotions of melancholy or depression. But it also evolves from the darkness into the dawn of the day offering hope to overcome and move on. I enjoyed that transition. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Many thanks, Debbie
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is a great little poem full of somber mess that is pushed away n the end. M
This line is divine:
to fight the demon come what may
I enjoyed this. Good luck in the competition.
Douglas
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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This is a great little poem full of somber mess that is pushed away n the end. M
This line is divine:
to fight the demon come what may
I enjoyed this. Good luck in the competition.
Douglas
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Many thanks, Doug. As I wrote it, I was reeling from a saga; it might be a story one day.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Excellent work and presentation! Ive used the phrase, come what may, in my writing, too. The images supports your thoughtfully chosen words. Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Excellent work and presentation! Ive used the phrase, come what may, in my writing, too. The images supports your thoughtfully chosen words. Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thanks Alex It came came together very quickly.
Comment from royowen
As the Niel Diamond song goes, some days are diamonds, some days are pretty ordinary, and some are crap. However your poem is a goodie, and a worthy entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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As the Niel Diamond song goes, some days are diamonds, some days are pretty ordinary, and some are crap. However your poem is a goodie, and a worthy entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I wrote it feeling very down. Your review has cheered me.
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Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am glad your poem ended on a positive note and it can be annoying being surrounded by people who seem to know it all. I enjoyed your method of relaxation with a scotch to drown your sorrows here. An inventive and clever post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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I am glad your poem ended on a positive note and it can be annoying being surrounded by people who seem to know it all. I enjoyed your method of relaxation with a scotch to drown your sorrows here. An inventive and clever post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Dolly. It was one of those days as I wrote . It might end up in story form.
Comment from Julie Helms
Excellent poem using great description to get across your feeling. The rhyme scheme worked very well. I especially like this line:
suddenly it is early dawn
a glorious sight to look upon
That is the hope in the darkness.
Well done! Julie
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Excellent poem using great description to get across your feeling. The rhyme scheme worked very well. I especially like this line:
suddenly it is early dawn
a glorious sight to look upon
That is the hope in the darkness.
Well done! Julie
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Julie. You are so right about the illusion created.
