Life's Twisted Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Life's Twisted Road - Chap 5"Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is great how you lead the reader right into the next suspenseful scenario. I've been told mentioning food and drink is a crowd pleaser but this would be pleasing some other crowd when the looks of things. Gallows laugh' You are addressing a very important issue and probably there are readers here who can identify. . good approach. What are things like in your governmental area. We're still okay in Vermont.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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This is great how you lead the reader right into the next suspenseful scenario. I've been told mentioning food and drink is a crowd pleaser but this would be pleasing some other crowd when the looks of things. Gallows laugh' You are addressing a very important issue and probably there are readers here who can identify. . good approach. What are things like in your governmental area. We're still okay in Vermont.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Wow, Liz... you jumped way back into a story I wrote a while ago. Unfortunately based, yet fiction, on a lot of things that happened in my family. Food tends to work its way into my stories because I was a cater for most of my life and I still cook for every one. Thanks so much for taking the time to read it.
Smiles, Carol
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I am on chapter 5 I will keep going
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Thank you so much. I was surprised anyone had gone back and was reading my stories. I appreciate it and hope to hear what you think.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, what a dilemma Gabby has found herself in. She overhears a conversation about what happened with her aunt Aubrey and her father. It didn't go well with them and Gabby is worried about what he will do.
I'm sort of liking Audrey as a sympathetic character. Maybe the two can help each other out at some level.
On another note, sorry I've gotten so far behind, but I've gotten that way with a lot of my writing and reviewing!
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Wow, what a dilemma Gabby has found herself in. She overhears a conversation about what happened with her aunt Aubrey and her father. It didn't go well with them and Gabby is worried about what he will do.
I'm sort of liking Audrey as a sympathetic character. Maybe the two can help each other out at some level.
On another note, sorry I've gotten so far behind, but I've gotten that way with a lot of my writing and reviewing!
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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It's exactly what Gabby needs right now in this difficult time, and Audrey means well too. Unfortunately, coming from the same background as Bobby, she also has been engrained with the idea one looks out for themselves because no body else will.
Thanks for reading all these chapters.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's sad that she couldn't talk to her father. Sadder that she hasn't a mother to talk to. It might have been better had she told her Aunt Audrey, at least she would have understood. Now she has some thinking to do. All on her own. Excellent chapter, my friend. Off to the next one. Love and hugs, Sandra xxxxx
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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It's sad that she couldn't talk to her father. Sadder that she hasn't a mother to talk to. It might have been better had she told her Aunt Audrey, at least she would have understood. Now she has some thinking to do. All on her own. Excellent chapter, my friend. Off to the next one. Love and hugs, Sandra xxxxx
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Hello, dear Sandra... I stepped away from my computer to "play" Landlord for the day, and returned to 26 reviews. What a blessed Saturday for me! Not so much for poor Gabby though. You're right - she's left alone to figure out her next step. Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Excellent writing. It is full of good sensory words and vibrant imagery. The dialogue was authentic to the story. Thank you for sharing this. Many writers will relate to this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Excellent writing. It is full of good sensory words and vibrant imagery. The dialogue was authentic to the story. Thank you for sharing this. Many writers will relate to this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Hello, Alex.... I've just returned to FS after a hiatus so I'm trying to get back into the swing of writing. I am thrilled that you enjoyed this chapter and maybe you will continue to follow. Thank you....Smiles, Carol
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I certainly will, Carol! I've been here a little over one year. Best wishes with your new writing! Welcome back!! :)
Alex :)
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Thank you!
Comment from LJbutterfly
The problem of unwanted pregnancies has hung over the heads of women for centuries. Gabby is so young to have made the adult decision to engage in sexual activity. Teenagers are just playing around to see what happens, never acting like a baby could happen. Gabby has a really large problem. What happens when she tells the baby's teenage father?
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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The problem of unwanted pregnancies has hung over the heads of women for centuries. Gabby is so young to have made the adult decision to engage in sexual activity. Teenagers are just playing around to see what happens, never acting like a baby could happen. Gabby has a really large problem. What happens when she tells the baby's teenage father?
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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I don't even think she had a moment to think things out. Her life is such a turmoil and in the heat of the moment, when she was drowning in grief, things went further than either of then intended. Now though, the fact is there and what should they do. Thanks, LOrraine.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your story keeps getting better. You do a magnificent job with the dialogue, which is the main thing that makes a story suitable or not so good. Nice work.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Your story keeps getting better. You do a magnificent job with the dialogue, which is the main thing that makes a story suitable or not so good. Nice work.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much... I think my muse might possibly be back from her long hiatus. At least, I hope so. Knowing I still can leave the reader with a cliff hanger is awesome!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
There are so many families fighting similar battles and situations, more so than we could ever imagine. But hopefully things will work themselves out. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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There are so many families fighting similar battles and situations, more so than we could ever imagine. But hopefully things will work themselves out. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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As they say "It'll all come out in the wash." LOL Thanks for your kindness. Hope all is well with you.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I guess, you're right. "It will all come out in the wash." Well, unless it's like tracks in drawers (underwear) that luckily not everyone gets to see. But if they do, it's too late to turn back anyway. Smiles and hugs back at you! Ric
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Thanks for making me chuckle this morning! Have a great day.... Off to post Chap. 6. Maybe...and that's a big maybe... my ability to do what I love has found an open door thanks to friends like you. Hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
So sad, but she will probably go ahead with an abortion. It's an unwanted child. Very well written, and I can see that your story will raise all sorts of ethical issues. A comment on today's society. Well written.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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So sad, but she will probably go ahead with an abortion. It's an unwanted child. Very well written, and I can see that your story will raise all sorts of ethical issues. A comment on today's society. Well written.
Wendy
Edit first sentence of paragraph 2: Audr(e)y
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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She's on the fence and only time will tell. We can hope for the best ... whatever that might be these days.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
There is nothing scarier than being in Gabby's position. With no parent to talk to, she is trying to figure out what to do about her pregnancy. At least her aunt has offered her one solution. Now she has to keep her friends from blabbing. Your characters are well-drawn, and their positions are quite clear. Very good writing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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There is nothing scarier than being in Gabby's position. With no parent to talk to, she is trying to figure out what to do about her pregnancy. At least her aunt has offered her one solution. Now she has to keep her friends from blabbing. Your characters are well-drawn, and their positions are quite clear. Very good writing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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I agree... our teenagers of today are forced to grow up too fast, missing out on the simple things in life. They believe they are all grown up and capable of making life's decisions themselves. I hope she ponders every option.
Thanks for the wonderful review and the stars. I truly appreciate them. Hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
It's good that Gabby has an understanding aunt, who already knows that the "hypothetical girl" is most likely Gabby herself. Hopefully, she can make the right decision and feel loved and supported throughout this ordeal.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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It's good that Gabby has an understanding aunt, who already knows that the "hypothetical girl" is most likely Gabby herself. Hopefully, she can make the right decision and feel loved and supported throughout this ordeal.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Circumstances, might change Gabby's relationship with her Aunt, but only time will tell, I guess. For Gabby's sake, I hope she finds someone to help guide her through this difficult time. Hugs, Carol