2024 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "When I Was a Tyke".
19 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Aw, Marival, isn't this the sweetest of poetry. This is just what a little girl would do and then try to put the fireflies in a bottle. This poem made me smile. Good luck. Un abrazo, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Aw, Marival, isn't this the sweetest of poetry. This is just what a little girl would do and then try to put the fireflies in a bottle. This poem made me smile. Good luck. Un abrazo, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Gracias. (*÷*) Ulla
I hope you have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from patcelaw
This is nicely done for the contest, and I am sure that it will bring back memories for a lot of the righteous here on this site two used to follow the fireflies at night. Patricia
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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This is nicely done for the contest, and I am sure that it will bring back memories for a lot of the righteous here on this site two used to follow the fireflies at night. Patricia
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Patricia.
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Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, this is a very well written 20 Syllable poem about when you were young. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Gypsy, this is a very well written 20 Syllable poem about when you were young. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Teri
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Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. When you were a tyke, did you know that you capture fireflies in a jar, for those were the days? Blessed Be n Hugs!!! Nice pictures!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. When you were a tyke, did you know that you capture fireflies in a jar, for those were the days? Blessed Be n Hugs!!! Nice pictures!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Aryr. Blessed to.
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You are so welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
When I was young, my brother, Dan and I would go out by the lilac bushes and catch fireflies. That was so much fun. Kids today don't get to do that. One day, Mom needed the car for some reason, so took Dad to work and left Dan and me alone for a few minutes. Our town was small, so it didn't take very long, but long enough for Dan to let the fireflies loose in the house. He wanted to know if they'd light up the house. Thank you for sharing and bringing this memory back.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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When I was young, my brother, Dan and I would go out by the lilac bushes and catch fireflies. That was so much fun. Kids today don't get to do that. One day, Mom needed the car for some reason, so took Dad to work and left Dan and me alone for a few minutes. Our town was small, so it didn't take very long, but long enough for Dan to let the fireflies loose in the house. He wanted to know if they'd light up the house. Thank you for sharing and bringing this memory back.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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We're the fireflies inside the house when your parents came back?
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
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Yes, mom wasn't happy. LOL
Comment from shelley kaye
I followed fireflies at grandma's back yard -- could be just me, but AT doesn't sound right... maybe... TO grandma's backyard? or... IN grandma's backyard?
other than that, a great 20 syllable poem
love the "my heart full of light" line! perfect!
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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I followed fireflies at grandma's back yard -- could be just me, but AT doesn't sound right... maybe... TO grandma's backyard? or... IN grandma's backyard?
other than that, a great 20 syllable poem
love the "my heart full of light" line! perfect!
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy....and wasn't being a kid special, before life had a chance hammer you with reality? I long to feel that carefree and worry free again
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Another fine poem, Gypsy....and wasn't being a kid special, before life had a chance hammer you with reality? I long to feel that carefree and worry free again
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Mike.
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Gypsy.
-You have used your 20 syllables well
with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-You create a vivid word picture of
times spent with your grandmother.
-I think of those times, as well, and
they bring a sense of comfort and joy.
-In this case enjoying the fireflies
made your "heart full of light."
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Gypsy.
-You have used your 20 syllables well
with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-You create a vivid word picture of
times spent with your grandmother.
-I think of those times, as well, and
they bring a sense of comfort and joy.
-In this case enjoying the fireflies
made your "heart full of light."
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much,
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You are very welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was such a soothing poem. Describing a time when the world and life were pretty simple. The excitement for the day was watching fireflies for that fleeting time at night. Those moments that left a mark on a child. Beautiful and memorable. Gretchen
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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This was such a soothing poem. Describing a time when the world and life were pretty simple. The excitement for the day was watching fireflies for that fleeting time at night. Those moments that left a mark on a child. Beautiful and memorable. Gretchen
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Gretchen.
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Comment from Sugarray77
You have a beautiful knack of developing your artwork as part of your verse. This is just lovely and your poem is perfect and nostalgic. I really enjoyed it, Gypsy!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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You have a beautiful knack of developing your artwork as part of your verse. This is just lovely and your poem is perfect and nostalgic. I really enjoyed it, Gypsy!!
Melissa
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Melissa.
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