2023 Gypsy's Clubs
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "I will Wait for You".
8 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The descriptive words you use in this poem are perfect for evoking an image in your reader's mind. Of course, the presentation is in a league of its own. Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
The descriptive words you use in this poem are perfect for evoking an image in your reader's mind. Of course, the presentation is in a league of its own. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Gypsy, this is a very well-written verse that is crafted with meaning and feeling. I enjoyed reading it. You did a fine job in crafting this Sedoka poetic form and it's perfect for this prompt. Hugs!
Melissa
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
Hello Gypsy, this is a very well-written verse that is crafted with meaning and feeling. I enjoyed reading it. You did a fine job in crafting this Sedoka poetic form and it's perfect for this prompt. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That's a sweet correspondence between two lovers waiting to meet not at a specific time of the clock but at the "at the edge of summer dusk" and they will be together until dawn. But summer nights are so short!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
That's a sweet correspondence between two lovers waiting to meet not at a specific time of the clock but at the "at the edge of summer dusk" and they will be together until dawn. But summer nights are so short!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Yes, also, the longest night of the year is coming soon... I think on the 21st. Maybe I'll write a poem about it.
Thank you, big sister, I hope you have a wonderful day.
Love
MariVal
Comment from shelley kaye
love the "you're the air in my lungs" line
and the edge of summer dusk...
wonderful imagery and smooth flow of words
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
love the "you're the air in my lungs" line
and the edge of summer dusk...
wonderful imagery and smooth flow of words
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
This was love sedoka, Gypsy. The picture proved to do that- a couple sitting close together. I find it interesting that they shared an interest. The first response was issued by the first responder where as the second one answered the first responder. Wow! That provided a lot of information. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
This was love sedoka, Gypsy. The picture proved to do that- a couple sitting close together. I find it interesting that they shared an interest. The first response was issued by the first responder where as the second one answered the first responder. Wow! That provided a lot of information. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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You are so welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from jmdg1954
Hi Gypsy (what's your name if you wouldn't mind sharing)?
This is an emotional love poem, question posed and positively answered.
After 44 years of marriage, my wife still takes my breath away when she enters a room.
Loved the poem,
John
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
Hi Gypsy (what's your name if you wouldn't mind sharing)?
This is an emotional love poem, question posed and positively answered.
After 44 years of marriage, my wife still takes my breath away when she enters a room.
Loved the poem,
John
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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John, how sweet, after 44 years? That's wonderful.
My name is MariVal. I'm from Spain though I grew up in California.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Janis M.
I love this form and that the reply is woven into the poem. I wonder though... what if the reply also had something to do with the night or summer dusk? Even if not directly word for word related, but something associated
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
I love this form and that the reply is woven into the poem. I wonder though... what if the reply also had something to do with the night or summer dusk? Even if not directly word for word related, but something associated
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thank you, great feedback.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I love that, I think that God is the air in my lungs, but some girls have certainly left me breathless, staggered by their beauty, this is a classy piece of work Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
I love that, I think that God is the air in my lungs, but some girls have certainly left me breathless, staggered by their beauty, this is a classy piece of work Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome