Fall Leaves
Kelly Lune 5-3-5 (crinkly maple leaves)15 total reviews
Comment from Austin Yu
Maple leaves in the fall are not only fallen leaves, they are a colorful canvas for artists and people admiring them alike. I love the idea of looking at things in a different perspective. If we look at leaves as something other than the boringness they are, we might actually learn to appreciate them more, and all of their beauty. Nice work!!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Maple leaves in the fall are not only fallen leaves, they are a colorful canvas for artists and people admiring them alike. I love the idea of looking at things in a different perspective. If we look at leaves as something other than the boringness they are, we might actually learn to appreciate them more, and all of their beauty. Nice work!!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thanks Austin for your review and expanded insight about those fallen leaves. I appreciate your comments.
Mark
Comment from Wendyanne
This is quite a nice piece of poetry written in haiku style. I do think that maple leaves are lovely, similar to the leaves of the horse chestnut in UK. I think I would probably say "paint pictures" rather than "pastures" but it is your poem.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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This is quite a nice piece of poetry written in haiku style. I do think that maple leaves are lovely, similar to the leaves of the horse chestnut in UK. I think I would probably say "paint pictures" rather than "pastures" but it is your poem.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Wendy,
It is an excellent suggestion. I strained to include a natural scene, ergo pastures. I actually thought about my (front) yard/lawn, but forced the alliteration. I have a Norway Maple in my front yard; the leaves are more reddish than orange. I should have taken a photo of the same a week or so ago and used instead of the FanArt one. (-;
Mark
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Mark.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery
with the maple leaves and the wind.
-You create a vivid word picture of autumn.
-A very good concluding line and effective
use of alliteration in line two.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Mark.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery
with the maple leaves and the wind.
-You create a vivid word picture of autumn.
-A very good concluding line and effective
use of alliteration in line two.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks Pam for such a nice review. You described my intended effort to a ?T.?
Mark
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You are very welcome, Mark.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-3-5, Fall Leaves, has the proper formatting and pictures the dried and parceled-out remnants of the sweetest summer that existed before the one that existed here before.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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This 5-3-5, Fall Leaves, has the proper formatting and pictures the dried and parceled-out remnants of the sweetest summer that existed before the one that existed here before.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks for that feedback Bill!
Mark
Comment from karenina
Oh, I do love the artist's rendition of Autumn on pasture/canvas! The endless shape shifting of wind blowing ever changing leaves is very creative!
Great image to accompany!
I see you have fans lining up to collaborate with you!
(smile)
They are in for a real treat!
Karenina
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Oh, I do love the artist's rendition of Autumn on pasture/canvas! The endless shape shifting of wind blowing ever changing leaves is very creative!
Great image to accompany!
I see you have fans lining up to collaborate with you!
(smile)
They are in for a real treat!
Karenina
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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K,
But my go-to is you for any collaboration. FanArt is my main source for artwork I pair with my posts.
M
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I've loved our collaborations, Mark...
Here's to more in 2024!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mark,
I've seen this painting since early October as I walked my trail in Grand Bay. There's nothing prettier than the red & yellow mix of fallen maple leaves.
I like the way you use the wind as nature's paint brush on a canvas.
I like the sound of the "crinkly" leaves" ... onomatopoeia.
And I like the alliteration of "paint pastures".
You know me... here's my offering,
crinkly maple leaves
paint pastures ~
breezes brush canvas
We had a foot of snow covering nature's floor until a week ago. Last Sunday into Monday, we had heavy winds and rain that took it all away, including many roof shingles. I thought the rest of my walks for this year would be on the treadmill, but I was wrong. So nice for this reprieve, being able to use the trail in late December!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Hi Mark,
I've seen this painting since early October as I walked my trail in Grand Bay. There's nothing prettier than the red & yellow mix of fallen maple leaves.
I like the way you use the wind as nature's paint brush on a canvas.
I like the sound of the "crinkly" leaves" ... onomatopoeia.
And I like the alliteration of "paint pastures".
You know me... here's my offering,
crinkly maple leaves
paint pastures ~
breezes brush canvas
We had a foot of snow covering nature's floor until a week ago. Last Sunday into Monday, we had heavy winds and rain that took it all away, including many roof shingles. I thought the rest of my walks for this year would be on the treadmill, but I was wrong. So nice for this reprieve, being able to use the trail in late December!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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KimBob,
Yes your last line suggestion is a worthy alliteration to consider. Pleased you liked my phrasing for this post. I have used this Lune format before. Maybe we can collaborate on a scene/poem at night to give us a more lunar/Lune feel?!? You write the first line, the I will contribute the middle line. The last can be yours or a melding of ideas.
Mark
moonlight ? snow(y) ?shadows ? owl ? etc. are just some thoughts on words for our poem
Mark
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Hi Mark,
I'll definitely give this some thought tonight, and send you a message! I love a challenge!
Kimbob
Comment from Sugarray77
I always enjoy reading your verses, Mark. This one is full of visual textures and colors and also includes the whimsy of the wind on canvas. I love it!
Melissa
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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I always enjoy reading your verses, Mark. This one is full of visual textures and colors and also includes the whimsy of the wind on canvas. I love it!
Melissa
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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So pleased you liked this one Melissa! Your first comment makes me proud.
Mark
Comment from Lisasview
Lovely Haiku poem Mark and very first time i have read any of your work. Perfect illustration to show off your work. As a painter, I am very involved in choosing the exact ~ right image for my work...
Lisasview
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Lovely Haiku poem Mark and very first time i have read any of your work. Perfect illustration to show off your work. As a painter, I am very involved in choosing the exact ~ right image for my work...
Lisasview
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Lisa,
So pleased you found me. I only write short stuff. Longer verses are not within my poetry wheelhouse.
I most often use the photos and illustrations from FanArt to pair with my posts.
If I had to describe my typical Haiku, I would call it ?observational Haiku? ? I write often what I see or can imagine in the physical world.
Mark
P.S. If you up for the challenge/idea, I would collaborate with you for a future FS post ? you provide me the image of your painting and I will compose a poem about the same (we can both then jointly edit the verse).
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Good morning Mark,
I might just do that... not sure if you know what I write about.
Lisa
Comment from Navada
I like the references to painting and a canvas here - certainly the seasons give us plenty of opportunity to create art and nature has a similar bent from time to time. Autumn is one of the best time for this. Thanks for the share.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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I like the references to painting and a canvas here - certainly the seasons give us plenty of opportunity to create art and nature has a similar bent from time to time. Autumn is one of the best time for this. Thanks for the share.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thanks Navada for your interpretation for my Lune poem post. Fall is indeed a spectacular canvas of Nature to observe.
Mark
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine painting in words here Mark and I enjoyed the textures of your imagination here, a fine presentation, we don't see many maple leaves here, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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A fine painting in words here Mark and I enjoyed the textures of your imagination here, a fine presentation, we don't see many maple leaves here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thanks Dolly for your review of my Lune poem.
Yes, I know you don?t have native maple syrup either. LOL
Mark
I have a Norway Maple in my front yard; its leaves are reddish.