True family
Being realistic10 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a meaningful poem. I'm so sorry that you had hardships growing up. I also was not wealthy, but my mom was a solid part of our family. She loved and was very humble. Liked your poem. I could relate how you feel.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
What a meaningful poem. I'm so sorry that you had hardships growing up. I also was not wealthy, but my mom was a solid part of our family. She loved and was very humble. Liked your poem. I could relate how you feel.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your very kind words Rosemary. I am honoured too by the six stars. Thank you.
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
You raised your children with love and showed how to love by modeling it. So naturally, your children are close and have that bond that was missing in your childhood. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
You raised your children with love and showed how to love by modeling it. So naturally, your children are close and have that bond that was missing in your childhood. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you Helen. I value your very kind words.
Wendy
Comment from Wendyanne
I think many people can relate to your well written piece of poetry. As they say, "we can choose our friends but not our family" and this is so true. I have several siblings although 2 brothers sadly committed suicide but the rest of us struggle to get along. You have described this kind of family well. Good luck.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
I think many people can relate to your well written piece of poetry. As they say, "we can choose our friends but not our family" and this is so true. I have several siblings although 2 brothers sadly committed suicide but the rest of us struggle to get along. You have described this kind of family well. Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much Wendyanne. I appreciate your thoughtful review.
Wendy
Comment from Aiona
I wish I had six stars left to give you. This poem is something I could have written, if I had enough skill as you! I too have my "chosen family." My birth family has chosen other things besides me. And that's okay. It has left me free to find my true family. I love that this poem rhymes. I love poems that rhyme. It has a nice meter as well, which could easily be made into a song. I wish you a Happy Holiday season with the people whom you love!!!! And who love you too!!!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
I wish I had six stars left to give you. This poem is something I could have written, if I had enough skill as you! I too have my "chosen family." My birth family has chosen other things besides me. And that's okay. It has left me free to find my true family. I love that this poem rhymes. I love poems that rhyme. It has a nice meter as well, which could easily be made into a song. I wish you a Happy Holiday season with the people whom you love!!!! And who love you too!!!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your super review. So encouraging. Wishing you a happy and meaningful Christmas as well, with your chosen people.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You have written a poem that many readers can relate to, I for one. You have expressed so clearly the disappointment, the efforts made and rejected, the growing distance and indifference. And yet, we are blessed with friends who share the love and acceptance we all seek and this is indeed a true family.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
You have written a poem that many readers can relate to, I for one. You have expressed so clearly the disappointment, the efforts made and rejected, the growing distance and indifference. And yet, we are blessed with friends who share the love and acceptance we all seek and this is indeed a true family.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much Ginda. It's always harder at Christmas when people say it's all about family, and that family are always there for you. Not always. And it's about Him. Lovely review.
Comment from JSD
Some really interesting thoughts here about the nature of family and friends and what matters in the end. This resonates perfectly with me and I'm sure it would with others. Well done. X
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
Some really interesting thoughts here about the nature of family and friends and what matters in the end. This resonates perfectly with me and I'm sure it would with others. Well done. X
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much. Glad to read your understanding words.
Comment from royowen
They say that true love never runs smooth, although this is about family, it's true that most family have a past, this could be a place where the gambit of mixed emotions are birthed, but we learn to forgive, as God forgives, there are conditions on God's forgiveness, we must forgive, as difficult as that is, this is skilfully penned, in articulate aabb rhyming, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
They say that true love never runs smooth, although this is about family, it's true that most family have a past, this could be a place where the gambit of mixed emotions are birthed, but we learn to forgive, as God forgives, there are conditions on God's forgiveness, we must forgive, as difficult as that is, this is skilfully penned, in articulate aabb rhyming, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some relationships will never mend and no matter how we try we cannot alter the past and make things better. We cannot make people be the way we want them to be, we just have to accept things the way they are and move one, a poignant write, great rhyming here, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
Some relationships will never mend and no matter how we try we cannot alter the past and make things better. We cannot make people be the way we want them to be, we just have to accept things the way they are and move one, a poignant write, great rhyming here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your understanding review, and yes you are exactly right.
Comment from Navada
Sometimes our birth families turn out not to be our true families in later life. I believe that family is what you make it. Our closest friends, our pets - these can also be counted as family. Thanks for the share and good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
Sometimes our birth families turn out not to be our true families in later life. I believe that family is what you make it. Our closest friends, our pets - these can also be counted as family. Thanks for the share and good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your understanding review. Thank you too for the good wishes.
Comment from Janis M.
This is an honest view point of one's own experience and how the concept of family can mean something different for everyone. The rhyme is consistent throughout though I did notice the change of syllables and meter in some lines though it was only slight.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
This is an honest view point of one's own experience and how the concept of family can mean something different for everyone. The rhyme is consistent throughout though I did notice the change of syllables and meter in some lines though it was only slight.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023
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Thank you Janis. You have given an honest and helpful review. I have made some adjustments to smooth the syllables and the metre.