Me. Her. Him
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Me. Her. Him - Chapter 53"A hidden past, a devastating truth.
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Comment from Navada
Goodness. This is a warning to anyone who drives while overly emotional and distracted. I'm sure this happens frequently and must have a series of consequences beyond even the damage to a vehicle or injury to a person.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Goodness. This is a warning to anyone who drives while overly emotional and distracted. I'm sure this happens frequently and must have a series of consequences beyond even the damage to a vehicle or injury to a person.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Hi Jacob how are you? You've written another great chapter. Fully engaging with lots of stuff going on. As is bible and believable characters. I did find a couple of things I was wondering about I have listed below And i've offered a suggestion for change this however does not take away talented writing you have produced. Great work!
"It looks as though they've got an indian"
Maybe say, "It looks as though they've got indian food".
" You can help yourself to some of my indian"
Maybe say, "Help yourself just some of the indian food."
The other way sounds like we're gonna actually eat a real Indian person LOL just a thought for you thanks so much!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Hi Jacob how are you? You've written another great chapter. Fully engaging with lots of stuff going on. As is bible and believable characters. I did find a couple of things I was wondering about I have listed below And i've offered a suggestion for change this however does not take away talented writing you have produced. Great work!
"It looks as though they've got an indian"
Maybe say, "It looks as though they've got indian food".
" You can help yourself to some of my indian"
Maybe say, "Help yourself just some of the indian food."
The other way sounds like we're gonna actually eat a real Indian person LOL just a thought for you thanks so much!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Thank you Lea.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"fed up of with". Somehow that does not appear to read quite properly?
"girl's for dinner" should be girls (more than one) for dinner.
"have moved in" is past tense, therefore "meet Caz" should be too.
Several plot lines going on with these characters.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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"fed up of with". Somehow that does not appear to read quite properly?
"girl's for dinner" should be girls (more than one) for dinner.
"have moved in" is past tense, therefore "meet Caz" should be too.
Several plot lines going on with these characters.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We are back in the present time now Jacob and still with no real answers, except William that could be a thief. I am glad that Angela seems to have a partner now who cares about her and is concerned after she had a bump in the car too, another fine chapter Jacob, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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We are back in the present time now Jacob and still with no real answers, except William that could be a thief. I am glad that Angela seems to have a partner now who cares about her and is concerned after she had a bump in the car too, another fine chapter Jacob, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you Dolly.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
We're now fast forward to 2022! Just when I wanted to know about Caz's arrival. I've been searching for an in-between chapter but there is none, sadly. This for Angela doesn't get any better. But what a dear, Paul is. The tension and mystery continues. Thanks for sharing your latest enjoyable chapter, Jacob! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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We're now fast forward to 2022! Just when I wanted to know about Caz's arrival. I've been searching for an in-between chapter but there is none, sadly. This for Angela doesn't get any better. But what a dear, Paul is. The tension and mystery continues. Thanks for sharing your latest enjoyable chapter, Jacob! Debbie
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you Debbie.
Comment from karenina
Drat! Yet again you've made a twist and left us pondering Caz's arrival on that doorstep while you zoom us to the present!
(Smart--you keep me on my toes!)
Oh dear... Present day William seems to have enamored Kirsty!
For info? Hmmmm.
We shall see!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Drat! Yet again you've made a twist and left us pondering Caz's arrival on that doorstep while you zoom us to the present!
(Smart--you keep me on my toes!)
Oh dear... Present day William seems to have enamored Kirsty!
For info? Hmmmm.
We shall see!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you Karenina.
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Welcome!
Comment from Paul Manton
Complicated background - I couldn't really keep up with everything - but the main points are clear: Angela had a very bad experience with William, who is pure poison without a bottle - now he has 'returned' everybody's life is in jeopardy - and especially Angela's, though she now has a wonderful marriage and a lovely daughter.
What's so good about your description of Angela's accident is that you have made the narrative so realistic. We can easily pick up on Angela's thoughts as they cascade through her mind. I'm not sure if I missed some of the story, but I'm only vaguely aware of the 'dark secret' which William knows.
Looking forward to the next part. Well written, Jacob.
Paul
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Complicated background - I couldn't really keep up with everything - but the main points are clear: Angela had a very bad experience with William, who is pure poison without a bottle - now he has 'returned' everybody's life is in jeopardy - and especially Angela's, though she now has a wonderful marriage and a lovely daughter.
What's so good about your description of Angela's accident is that you have made the narrative so realistic. We can easily pick up on Angela's thoughts as they cascade through her mind. I'm not sure if I missed some of the story, but I'm only vaguely aware of the 'dark secret' which William knows.
Looking forward to the next part. Well written, Jacob.
Paul
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you Paul. I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
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Very much so. Thank you.
Paul
Comment from Austin Yu
Nice story! You always seem to have a good and thourough dialogue throughout your stories. I like how you weave a bit of danger into your stories, like how William's into drug dealing, and the complications that come from these types of relationships.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Nice story! You always seem to have a good and thourough dialogue throughout your stories. I like how you weave a bit of danger into your stories, like how William's into drug dealing, and the complications that come from these types of relationships.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Sarita Méndez
Another good chapter in your book, I really appreciate this story, even if I don't have enough time to read it from the beginning because I'm too busy dut to my work.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Another good chapter in your book, I really appreciate this story, even if I don't have enough time to read it from the beginning because I'm too busy dut to my work.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Your story is getting better with each chapter. I have been following this writing for some time and am still intrigued enough to stick with it. It is the way you handle the dialogue that makes it so interesting to me. Nice work.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Your story is getting better with each chapter. I have been following this writing for some time and am still intrigued enough to stick with it. It is the way you handle the dialogue that makes it so interesting to me. Nice work.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thank you.