Comment from karenina

Excellent

All signs point to....

Angela being irresponsible, impulsive, flippant, naive...

William had opportunity...

So did others.

She was IN LOVE with him?

She ought to be arrested for immaturity!

Karenina

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

Thank you Karenina.

reply by karenina on 13-Dec-2023

I'm thinking about this story as I go about my day!

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is excellent but sad. It was almost not surprise but I wonder how long it had been since she had last seen the money. Did she really know fo sure it was still there when William came over. They did have a party there early. Someone could have taken it then. If she is going to have a child that is Willilam, I have assume at some they will go all the way.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023

Thank you Beth.

Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

Is that dirty birds dealing dot money like that that turd! Well look at that more tangled webs we weve. You're writing improves by the day it's got me reading so that's a good thing. I appreciate the story line in your building here. I think it's interesting. I don't see any issues with grammar punctuation or sentence structure. It's always you've done a fine job with this entry. I hope you have an awesome day!

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023

Thank you Lea.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I'm glad Angela has now revealed the truth about William and her suspicions and it does start to look as if Caz might have been in on it. This is a dreadful situation that the police won't want to touch because there is no hard evidence of the money being there in the first place. I'm on to your next chapter now. A great read! Thanks Jacob! Debbie

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023

Thank you Debbie.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I surely hope Angela learned her lesson, but I am guessing she's going to need to get kicked by the mule a few times before she realizes that mule kicks. Some people are like that. Thank you for sharing. I can't wait to see what happens next.

'Well we didn't take it,' Hayley says (comma after 'Well,')

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023

Thank you Barbara.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I enjoyed listening to your new chapter in the book. It moves along well. Your punctuation and all of your formats seems to be in good shape. I wish you the very best with your book and with your writing as well Pat

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023

Thank you.