Sandra's Lover
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The date"A macabre crime thriller. Grotesque and detailed.
3 total reviews
Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent chapter. I was interested from beginning to end. There are two small edits. "She didn't know (h) is name." "Her hair done and attempts (at)and new make-up. delete and. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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This is an excellent chapter. I was interested from beginning to end. There are two small edits. "She didn't know (h) is name." "Her hair done and attempts (at)and new make-up. delete and. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Oh thank you! Every edit is appreciated.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well, I'm not saying absolutely written chapter. Your dialogue is almost spot on imagination behind this story deserves a 6. One small edit. Consider a rephrase on the below.
"Perfect. And Aliss. I like you. Just you. And don't stress, ok. I'll be a perfect gentleman."
A few closing
comments...."
This does not take away from the obvious talent in your writing throughout your chapters.
Jenny and is engaging as all of them and it's got serious creep factor too! Great job! Best of luck. it's a grand entry!
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Well, I'm not saying absolutely written chapter. Your dialogue is almost spot on imagination behind this story deserves a 6. One small edit. Consider a rephrase on the below.
"Perfect. And Aliss. I like you. Just you. And don't stress, ok. I'll be a perfect gentleman."
A few closing
comments...."
This does not take away from the obvious talent in your writing throughout your chapters.
Jenny and is engaging as all of them and it's got serious creep factor too! Great job! Best of luck. it's a grand entry!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Merci beaucoup!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written story, and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. The story moves along at a nice pace, and it was a pleasure. I wish you the very merry Christmas and most happy new year.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This is a very well written story, and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. The story moves along at a nice pace, and it was a pleasure. I wish you the very merry Christmas and most happy new year.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you, I look forward to your messages. My first full supporter. I greatly appreciate it. Merry christmas to you as well. Keep tuned, more chapters are coming.
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I indeed, will keep tuned.