It's My Boulevard
A poem in two parts. Reference-The Boulevard of Broken Dream34 total reviews
Comment from Yusita
A unique and great piece. It doesn't follow a more traditional format, which is why I love it. Loved the topic as well. It evokes a mixture of different feelings. The ending was epic. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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A unique and great piece. It doesn't follow a more traditional format, which is why I love it. Loved the topic as well. It evokes a mixture of different feelings. The ending was epic. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
This is very cool. I liked the way you laid this up. I'm sorry it wasn't a phone within the story very interesting! You've got some sublime word choices too I like your reference to icarus as well. I see no issues with spelling subject matter. Oh it's well written too I wish you best of luck! have a great night!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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This is very cool. I liked the way you laid this up. I'm sorry it wasn't a phone within the story very interesting! You've got some sublime word choices too I like your reference to icarus as well. I see no issues with spelling subject matter. Oh it's well written too I wish you best of luck! have a great night!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much, Lea.
Merry Christmas.
Comment from Frank Malley
What a great idea to choose a kite for a central image in a poem. And then to let it go free at its towering apex of flight, free to see its world. This poem creates an abrupt pastiche of images and ideas which by the very spareness of information cause the reader to cast about for connections aggressively. And while it's true that other animals dream, they don't dream the big and thrilling ones that we do, both awake and asleep.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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What a great idea to choose a kite for a central image in a poem. And then to let it go free at its towering apex of flight, free to see its world. This poem creates an abrupt pastiche of images and ideas which by the very spareness of information cause the reader to cast about for connections aggressively. And while it's true that other animals dream, they don't dream the big and thrilling ones that we do, both awake and asleep.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Smiling. I would imagine that you are right.
Merry Christmas.
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I think I was perhaps not patient enough with "It's My Boulevard." I read it again, just now, and still felt my impatience to conform it neatly. The sadness in the poem is the riddle; has something befallen the little girl, or has she just grown up? I'm gonna write down your title so I can read it again when I'm more at ease. Frank
Comment from RaynaHarleenQuinns
You could tell a story in a poem and this is a perfect example of it.
I love this poem, it reminds us all of lost memories of our childhood and it works
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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You could tell a story in a poem and this is a perfect example of it.
I love this poem, it reminds us all of lost memories of our childhood and it works
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much.
Merry Christmas.
Comment from T.A. Walk
Wonderful poem, thank you for sharing!
I have no critique to offer, this was outstanding.
I reviewed to mention my humor in reading your author notes. I started keeping a recorder nearby and deciphering it later. It isn't my favorite option as I prefer a pen and paper, but it works in a pinch!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Wonderful poem, thank you for sharing!
I have no critique to offer, this was outstanding.
I reviewed to mention my humor in reading your author notes. I started keeping a recorder nearby and deciphering it later. It isn't my favorite option as I prefer a pen and paper, but it works in a pinch!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Yes, I used to do the same. Thank you.
Merry Christmas.
Comment from Ds. Savage
I am unsure if the story that played out in my minds eye or if the perspective on the entire meaning behind your words is even close to the same for me as it is for you. Either way, I definitely felt an interesting tug at the back of my conscience while reading this so I thank you for taking the time to present it to the public.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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I am unsure if the story that played out in my minds eye or if the perspective on the entire meaning behind your words is even close to the same for me as it is for you. Either way, I definitely felt an interesting tug at the back of my conscience while reading this so I thank you for taking the time to present it to the public.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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It is my pleasure to attempt to confuse (I mean entertain)
you. Lol
Merry Christmas.
Comment from jim vecchio
It wasn't long at ll. It was YOUR poem and just long enough for YOU! Some have tried on this site to teach me about meter, which
I need, but the words in my head don't always conform to strict meter. As you said, "Dreams live, until you kill them." Don't ever kill your dreams!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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It wasn't long at ll. It was YOUR poem and just long enough for YOU! Some have tried on this site to teach me about meter, which
I need, but the words in my head don't always conform to strict meter. As you said, "Dreams live, until you kill them." Don't ever kill your dreams!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Boy, ain?t dat da truth.
Merry Christmas.
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Hope your dreams came true this Christmas!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and nice presentation, Doug.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem with many good images.
-I like the difference between the two parts.
-The first one involves flying a kite and
the little girl has to learn to let it go free.
-Even though that was hard to do for her,
I bet she enjoyed seeing the kite soar into the trees.
-The second part is more inner reflection about
the significance of the boulevard and dreams.
-It seems like it is personal encouragement
to keep going, keep walking, keep dreaming.
-You make a good point at the end.
-Well done. Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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-Great artwork and nice presentation, Doug.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem with many good images.
-I like the difference between the two parts.
-The first one involves flying a kite and
the little girl has to learn to let it go free.
-Even though that was hard to do for her,
I bet she enjoyed seeing the kite soar into the trees.
-The second part is more inner reflection about
the significance of the boulevard and dreams.
-It seems like it is personal encouragement
to keep going, keep walking, keep dreaming.
-You make a good point at the end.
-Well done. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much.
And Merry Christmas.
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You are very welcome, and Merry Christmas.
Comment from Aussie
Dare to dream again. We all need to stop being like the ostrich with its head in the sand. I liked your fast-put-together boulevard of dreams. When the spirit moves us, no matter how silly we think, write it down because it means Life! K XX
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Dare to dream again. We all need to stop being like the ostrich with its head in the sand. I liked your fast-put-together boulevard of dreams. When the spirit moves us, no matter how silly we think, write it down because it means Life! K XX
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Yup. Smiling and thank you.
Merry Christmas.
Comment from Kate MacDonald
Some wonderful insights here, can you force a kite to fly, when tugging causes pain to you both? Letting it go, even if you are still earthbound is brave too.
Changing the lexicon from "Part One" to "Part II"
showed that the outlook had changed, but broken can be mended, and dreams can be restructured.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Some wonderful insights here, can you force a kite to fly, when tugging causes pain to you both? Letting it go, even if you are still earthbound is brave too.
Changing the lexicon from "Part One" to "Part II"
showed that the outlook had changed, but broken can be mended, and dreams can be restructured.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Thank you.
Merry Christmas.