Sandra's Lover
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5 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
" Then he opens the container and pulls out several sections out of it." this line made me stumble, as if maybe one to many (out) this maybe just me, other than that this is a most engrossing and enthralling read, I can see you have set this up as a killer that is going to be so very hard to catch, I am looking forward to catching up, I am hooked****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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" Then he opens the container and pulls out several sections out of it." this line made me stumble, as if maybe one to many (out) this maybe just me, other than that this is a most engrossing and enthralling read, I can see you have set this up as a killer that is going to be so very hard to catch, I am looking forward to catching up, I am hooked****kahpot
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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I appreciate your feedback i will look at the wording thank you
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhhh my! This is going to be one really difficult perp to catch. He is so THOROUGH and OCD and perfection-oriented. Can't wait to read the next chapter of THIS! You definitely have me hooked. Very nice work, Eileen.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Ohhhh my! This is going to be one really difficult perp to catch. He is so THOROUGH and OCD and perfection-oriented. Can't wait to read the next chapter of THIS! You definitely have me hooked. Very nice work, Eileen.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you Rachelle - I will be posting another chapter today! I am so glad you liked it!
Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent first chapter. You pulled me into the story from beginning to end. Your descriptions of the death and clean-up are very detailed. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day. I will become a fan of yours so I can continue reading your story.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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This is an excellent first chapter. You pulled me into the story from beginning to end. Your descriptions of the death and clean-up are very detailed. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day. I will become a fan of yours so I can continue reading your story.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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thank you so much! The story lightens from this point. I look forward to your review of chapter two!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh Wow, Eileen! I'm exhausted! If you could have seen me wincing reading this, you would have known for sure that your writing made quite an impact. I wasn't expecting it to be as graphic as it was but, my goodness, you can really capture your reader. I could practically feel those knife incisions and the removal of the clitoris... The cleaning up operation was very cleverly done because we know that people like this with OCD can demonstrate it in other aspects of their life as well as crime and can actually find the mess that they create quite distasteful. It's the process and end result that excite them. I'm about to go to bed (UK time) so I hope I won't be meeting your villain in my dreams!) Congrats on your milestone by the way! I'll look forward to reading more (I think:)) Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Oh Wow, Eileen! I'm exhausted! If you could have seen me wincing reading this, you would have known for sure that your writing made quite an impact. I wasn't expecting it to be as graphic as it was but, my goodness, you can really capture your reader. I could practically feel those knife incisions and the removal of the clitoris... The cleaning up operation was very cleverly done because we know that people like this with OCD can demonstrate it in other aspects of their life as well as crime and can actually find the mess that they create quite distasteful. It's the process and end result that excite them. I'm about to go to bed (UK time) so I hope I won't be meeting your villain in my dreams!) Congrats on your milestone by the way! I'll look forward to reading more (I think:)) Debbie
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you Debbie! I am about to upload chapter two!
Comment from John Ciarmello
EEE YIKES!
First, congratulations on your milestone, and what a milestone it is!
I'm not sure I've ever read something as graphic and disturbingly diabolical as this story chapter here at FS.
Your imagination (Let's hope) is off the charts, Eileen! Best, JohnC
If I had to say anything (and unfortunately, it's too late for chapter one, but perhaps reveal a bit more background, it may enhance the plot and bring us up to snuff on the main character other than he's a serial killer. Many Serial killers have everyday lives.
Great work! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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EEE YIKES!
First, congratulations on your milestone, and what a milestone it is!
I'm not sure I've ever read something as graphic and disturbingly diabolical as this story chapter here at FS.
Your imagination (Let's hope) is off the charts, Eileen! Best, JohnC
If I had to say anything (and unfortunately, it's too late for chapter one, but perhaps reveal a bit more background, it may enhance the plot and bring us up to snuff on the main character other than he's a serial killer. Many Serial killers have everyday lives.
Great work! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Thank you John! As I add chapters his story will be revealed. There was a method to writing with this opening. It makes more sense as time goes on.
Thank you again I hope you continue to read!
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Gottcha! I will continue to read, for sure!