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Me. Her. Him

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A hidden past, a devastating truth.

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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Finally. This is what I thought all along. What else could weigh so heavily? Pose such danger? But still. I doubt William can actually prove anything, if he could he would have been blackmailing her all these years.
I will keep reading. Karen

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
    Thank you.
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 21-Nov-2023
    U R Welcome. Karen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Oh my goodness Jacob, the plot thickens and the tension rises in this post and I enjoyed your chapter. I was a bit disappointed that nothing was found on the computer after we listened to it whirring up with excitement that something juicy was going to be found.

Just a small typo here:

In your notes at the beginning:
her that William (also) contacted her,

Love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
    Thank you Dolly.
Comment from eliz100
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This is an excellent chapter. Now, this is getting very interesting, Killer? I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
    Thank you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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KILLER!! Now that's interesting. Was somebody killed all those years ago. I can't wait to read more. You are doing a great job writing this. Thank you for sharing it with us. I couldn't find any way to improve it.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
    Thank you Barbara.
Comment from BethShelby
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Now this is getting serious. Is Caz really dead? What does Angela know and if she had anything to do with it, what would her motivation be? This expains why she consider William to be such a threat and maybe why there isn't many she can confide in about this. I love a good mystery. You are presenting one to keep me interested.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
    Thank you Beth, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from karenina
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Whoa! Now here's a breakthrough of sorts! Killer!! The plot thickens, as they say!

The paranoia regarding her husband has yet to reveal if he is up to something sinister.

Angela seems ready to break..or break something!

Onward! Your readers are leaning in!

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girlfriend?---"something bad has happened to his former girlfirend, their friend,)

Dell?--"It's one of those old fashioned Del ones"
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Karenina

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
    Thank you Karenina. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
reply by karenina on 20-Nov-2023
    I now trust no one but you!

    LOL...
Comment from T.A. Walk
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I haven't read the rest, but this portion is descriptive and well written.

I caught the name of the computer misspelled. You have it as Del(l).

When you mention the time is 3pm, since you mention it is afternoon, I think you could drop the pm and make the sentence cleaner.

Great work, thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
    Thank you Thomas, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.