Comment from Iza Deleanu

Good

It's hard to keep secrets in a family and also it's ridiculous to expect transparence when you keep your own secrets. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Thank you.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Great job at "showing" us the surroundings... You've engaged my senses!

Your dialogue is believable... there is often such banter between mother and grown daughter.

I'm anxious for some action and revelations now.

Karenina

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Thank you Karenina.

reply by karenina on 20-Nov-2023

Welcome!

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this chapter. You are fleshing out Angela's character through the conversation with her daughter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you.

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

She is certifiably looney. Yes indeedy, get out those pajamas with the really long arms. She is melting all the way down to a puddle on the floor. We still have no clues as to what happened. Karen

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 19-Nov-2023

have good week. Karen

Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

Wow quite the story! Looks like Angela has a couple things to sort out!
Paul is a vibrant character like all of your characters are written beautifully. You have some really good realism. Great story with great characters. I see no issues with grammar spelling sentence structure. None of those things they're all really well done and a fine entry too. I wish you best of luck!

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you Lea, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Well Angela has opened up to her daughter about her suspicions, something I would never do myself, I would go straight to Paul and ask him. I enjoyed the descriptions of the surroundings in this post Jacob, the story is very slow and I wonder how long you are going to keep us waiting to find out what's going on here? But that's just me being impatient, a fine chapter, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you Dolly.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Hmm, I think this is a well written chapter. Perhaps not a lot happening here, or that exciting. It seems this gives the reader a deeper looking into the mother daughter relationship, and touches on why certain topics should not be discussed with your adult children, as if they are friends.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you. I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I enjoyed the post and wished it was longer but the length is right for a post which will be read on this site. Angela is suspicious of almost everthing and has her husband and daughter worried about her.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you Beth, I?m pleased that you?re still enjoying it.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this with addition with us. Angela just gets deeper and deeper. She needs to confide in Paul. This is a good write.

relieved I can finally sit down, my legs are beginning to ache. (you can omit 'down', it's understood)

I smile to reassure her I know she's joking.

'Yeah, of course.' (should be moved up closer to the action.)

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you Barbara. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.