Monster March
The Beast discovers a Human settlement... Now what?3 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I was lured in by your beautiful poetry...
I've spent a good long time reading your stories.
Your nonfiction essay on suicide just wowed me...
You have a talent for thus genre, but it's not my thing.
Tighten it up a bit-- give it a hard edit and Google fantasy/genre sites accepting submissions!
Dream big!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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I was lured in by your beautiful poetry...
I've spent a good long time reading your stories.
Your nonfiction essay on suicide just wowed me...
You have a talent for thus genre, but it's not my thing.
Tighten it up a bit-- give it a hard edit and Google fantasy/genre sites accepting submissions!
Dream big!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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This is one weird and never really worked but I can?t let it go lol!!
Tighten it up a bit, love that!!
You make me think of a soldier talking like that!!
Thank you for reviewing!!
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Our writing is like our children. We never really let them go! You made my laugh on the "tighten in up" bit. My dad was, is, always will be a Marine (even though he's passed on he instilled in us that's an eternal thing)--) I heard that phrase A LOT throughout my life!
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We military gents are a lot alike :)
Comment from BethShelby
You have told this tale well although I must confess I'm not a fan of horror stories but there are many who are. What I get from this is there are prehaps other things we've been told are myths and fairy tale and maybe one day will realize that we passed over them when in fact we might have been better prepared if we had realized those who claimed they were myths were wrong.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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You have told this tale well although I must confess I'm not a fan of horror stories but there are many who are. What I get from this is there are prehaps other things we've been told are myths and fairy tale and maybe one day will realize that we passed over them when in fact we might have been better prepared if we had realized those who claimed they were myths were wrong.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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See I love that you got that in there. Who knows what we don?t know!!
Comment from Emily Juhas
I really enjoyed the pace and subject matter of this story. A great read. I really find it difficult to find room for improvement but maybe some sentences could be more dynamic if they were shorter and the words more descriptive. This comment is only due to the instructions stating to look for improvement opportunities. I really enjoyed your story.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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I really enjoyed the pace and subject matter of this story. A great read. I really find it difficult to find room for improvement but maybe some sentences could be more dynamic if they were shorter and the words more descriptive. This comment is only due to the instructions stating to look for improvement opportunities. I really enjoyed your story.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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I appreciate you. This one is just weird all around. Felt funny writing it like it wasn?t really meant to be a story.
I?ll take a look back through and see what I can edit up some.
Thank you for your review.