Me. Her. Him
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Me. Her. Him - Chapter Twelve "A hidden past, a devastating truth.
6 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This excellent work. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery and authentic dialogue that will draw in readers. I enjoyed reviewing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
  |
This excellent work. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery and authentic dialogue that will draw in readers. I enjoyed reviewing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
-
Thank you Alex.
Comment from karenina
I do not think it would have been sustainable if you hadn't moved the story forward here. It's confirmed that this is the man Ange has feared, and indeed he seems to be threatening! The mention of Caz, and Ange coloring her hair adds more clues (and mystery) to how these puzzle pieces will fit together, ultimately... But the corner pieces are set and I see a firm outline of the border!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
|
I do not think it would have been sustainable if you hadn't moved the story forward here. It's confirmed that this is the man Ange has feared, and indeed he seems to be threatening! The mention of Caz, and Ange coloring her hair adds more clues (and mystery) to how these puzzle pieces will fit together, ultimately... But the corner pieces are set and I see a firm outline of the border!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
-
Thank you Karenina, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
-
I'm addicted. Keep them coming...
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. We finally find out William is thee, William. I look forward to finding out what William did. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
|
This is another excellent chapter. We finally find out William is thee, William. I look forward to finding out what William did. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
-
Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
As we are unaware of what has actually happened in the past we do not realise the gravity of the situation between Angela and William, but the intrigue continues here Jacob and I am wondering when we will gain some information as to what has happened? Another fine chapter in your story, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
|
As we are unaware of what has actually happened in the past we do not realise the gravity of the situation between Angela and William, but the intrigue continues here Jacob and I am wondering when we will gain some information as to what has happened? Another fine chapter in your story, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
-
Thank you Dolly.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
A little more information comes out about William and Angela, but still not enough to know exactly what happened, but we can speculate. I am wondering what she's going to tell Kristy when she asks. This is another good write.
He doesn't make eye contact with me as I sit down. (you can omit 'down' it isn't needed)
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
|
A little more information comes out about William and Angela, but still not enough to know exactly what happened, but we can speculate. I am wondering what she's going to tell Kristy when she asks. This is another good write.
He doesn't make eye contact with me as I sit down. (you can omit 'down' it isn't needed)
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
-
Thank you Barbara.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Finally something happened. She is going to lose it big time. She is going to do something bad. He will push her too hard. He will be the hunted. Good.
The writing was more involved. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
|
Finally something happened. She is going to lose it big time. She is going to do something bad. He will push her too hard. He will be the hunted. Good.
The writing was more involved. Karen
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
-
Thank you Karen.
-
:-)