2023 Gypsy's Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 72 "~ Hesitant Red Leaf ~"x
6 total reviews
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh this autumn leaf haiku was so cool
love red leaves - and your imagery of one hanging and waiting for the right time to let go is great
good word choices and smooth flow
and cool pics and colours
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
ooh this autumn leaf haiku was so cool
love red leaves - and your imagery of one hanging and waiting for the right time to let go is great
good word choices and smooth flow
and cool pics and colours
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Shelley , that is really nice of you. I am grateful for your ongoing support and kind reviews. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
Another beautiful autumn poem. I love the gentle way you describe a lone leaf ready to separate from the tree. It's a waiting game. Beautifully written. You are a superb haiku poet. There is always exquisite imagery and multiple layers of emotion. Gretchen
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
Another beautiful autumn poem. I love the gentle way you describe a lone leaf ready to separate from the tree. It's a waiting game. Beautifully written. You are a superb haiku poet. There is always exquisite imagery and multiple layers of emotion. Gretchen
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Gretchen... I appreciate your kind words. (*÷*)
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ricky1024
Yes Fall is around the corner and eell written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Art work appropriately compliment poem.
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
Yes Fall is around the corner and eell written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Art work appropriately compliment poem.
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Mea culpa. I commented on the wrong post. Below is the text review for your hesitant red leaf poem.
This is an exquisite post. Colors and verse paired together for a nice overall presentation.
I might consider: "wavers upon the bare bough" (or branch, or twig). It is the leaf that wavers. I would change to an initial capital letter for 'fall.' It is certainly a pun on its meaning.
Mark
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
Gypsy,
Mea culpa. I commented on the wrong post. Below is the text review for your hesitant red leaf poem.
This is an exquisite post. Colors and verse paired together for a nice overall presentation.
I might consider: "wavers upon the bare bough" (or branch, or twig). It is the leaf that wavers. I would change to an initial capital letter for 'fall.' It is certainly a pun on its meaning.
Mark
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Mark, that is really nice of you. I am grateful for your ongoing support and kind reviews. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing another poem about this red leaf. I admire its dedication. I swear I could read your beautiful poetry all day long and never get tired of it. I love it.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
Thank you for sharing another poem about this red leaf. I admire its dedication. I swear I could read your beautiful poetry all day long and never get tired of it. I love it.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Barbara, that is really nice of you. I am grateful for your ongoing support and kind reviews. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad you kept this poem as is and I look forward to your other poem for the contest. There's a typo in the title but I'm sure you fixed it already. Loved the poem!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
I'm glad you kept this poem as is and I look forward to your other poem for the contest. There's a typo in the title but I'm sure you fixed it already. Loved the poem!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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I tried to change it last night but it was really hard. I am glad I kept it. Thank you big sister. I wrote a love 5/7/5 for the contest. I hope I don't confuse people. LoL it's called, whispers in your ear