Rainbow Over Arroyo Grande
They loved 'neath a rainbow8 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Beautifully written. I'm certain your post took a much different path than most "Rainbow" poems. This reminds me of the old time western songs...
Very nice! I even have a melody in my head and can (quietly) sing this ballad.
Karenina
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Beautifully written. I'm certain your post took a much different path than most "Rainbow" poems. This reminds me of the old time western songs...
Very nice! I even have a melody in my head and can (quietly) sing this ballad.
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
Comment from Spitfire
I could see this as a ballad. Too bad you didn't enter this in a contest for a poem that tells a story. A twist of sorts with the ending as Sandra literally dies but Romero's death is figurative. Thanks for the notes. I knew a Sandra and that fits!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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I could see this as a ballad. Too bad you didn't enter this in a contest for a poem that tells a story. A twist of sorts with the ending as Sandra literally dies but Romero's death is figurative. Thanks for the notes. I knew a Sandra and that fits!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Thank you! Sometimes it's hard to come up with a story or poem and then see where it fits. Maybe I should "stockpile" some!
Comment from papa55mike
When worlds collide like theirs it's usually a comet across the sky then disappears. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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When worlds collide like theirs it's usually a comet across the sky then disappears. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for reading and your kind words!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Jim,
Your wonderful song of romance and heartache is heartfelt and sad.
I like the refrains and the symbolism of the name Sandra.
Great poem, Jim.
Keep writing!
Cindy
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Jim,
Your wonderful song of romance and heartache is heartfelt and sad.
I like the refrains and the symbolism of the name Sandra.
Great poem, Jim.
Keep writing!
Cindy
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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I just finished responding to a whole page full of comment and then I think they got erased. So please forgive me. I want you to know all your comments mean a lot to me and I?m grateful to you!
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You?re welcome, Jim.😊
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well, well, well, there is a lot of double meanings and inside insinuations in the neat piece of work.
I think you took a completely unique and unexpected route with the prompt.
Good luck in the contest.
D
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Well, well, well, there is a lot of double meanings and inside insinuations in the neat piece of work.
I think you took a completely unique and unexpected route with the prompt.
Good luck in the contest.
D
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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I just finished responding to a whole page full of comment and then I think they got erased. So please forgive me. I want you to know all your comments mean a lot to me and I?m grateful to you!
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No forgiveness needed. This was great.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Complete song and or poem. The poem spoke of love, deep yearning, and betrayal. The usual for a country song. man meets a woman and wants the woman for himself, she does not comply another man takes his place, he kills woman. Shame.
Karen
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Complete song and or poem. The poem spoke of love, deep yearning, and betrayal. The usual for a country song. man meets a woman and wants the woman for himself, she does not comply another man takes his place, he kills woman. Shame.
Karen
Comment Written 03-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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I thank you for reading. Lately, I've been trying for something different each time, either the tone or the characters or some varying of mood.
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That is why we all are here, To try new stuff. Read my "Murphy's Law" it will give you a laugh. Karen
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Thank you. I look forward to it!
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I just wrote "Best Mantra Ever"
take a look see. Karen
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I can't believe it! I just read and left comments a minute ago!
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I must have ESP! karen
Thanks as always for reading my stuff. Karen
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Thank you for writing it
Comment from JSD
An intriguing and unusual response to the prompt. Really interesting writing. Almost ballad-like. I like the style and the language which creates a real scene and satisfying atmosphere/mood. Well done, and good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023
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An intriguing and unusual response to the prompt. Really interesting writing. Almost ballad-like. I like the style and the language which creates a real scene and satisfying atmosphere/mood. Well done, and good luck.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much! I appreciate your words!
Comment from Susan Newell
This one intrigued me and I loved the insertions of the refrains. This is very original for a contest that is sure to make the rainbow the overt theme of many entries. This poem really makes one think of "somewhere over the rainbow" . . . And how we never know what lies there. Nice piece.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023
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This one intrigued me and I loved the insertions of the refrains. This is very original for a contest that is sure to make the rainbow the overt theme of many entries. This poem really makes one think of "somewhere over the rainbow" . . . And how we never know what lies there. Nice piece.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023
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Thank you! Your words were very nice!
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Most welcome.
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Many thanks!