A Particular Friendship
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "At Home on the Farm"We meet Lizzy who has just come out of the convent
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You write well, but I keep wondering why you stayed in so long. I guess you did what a lot of us do you look for others who can fix us and make us whole.
Your tale is at times visceral which is very good, but also makes me wish I had been there to save you. You do write bravely and well. Check out my first poem here "Remittance". Tell me what you think.
Karen
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2023
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You write well, but I keep wondering why you stayed in so long. I guess you did what a lot of us do you look for others who can fix us and make us whole.
Your tale is at times visceral which is very good, but also makes me wish I had been there to save you. You do write bravely and well. Check out my first poem here "Remittance". Tell me what you think.
Karen
Comment Written 23-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your intense review. I stayed so long because I thought I could change things from within, but eventually saw the light after all my friends had left long before. I began to face the fact that the nuns or the Catholic Church were not who they said they were.
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People are never just one thing though, are they? And, I think that people are starting to believe more like I do that there are beings that made us and control things a little. I also believe that we, our essence comes back over and over until we learn what we should, and that when we do, we become something else, pure enrgy maybe. What, I really don't know, but I do know that we are made up of the same stuff that makes up the universe, we ae star stuff!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I understand why you switched to the time she was in the house with the other nuns because Jody so reminded her of her own mother. This is well done for comparison. When you are speaking of Lizzy's mother and the two kids in the car, it seemed you were talking about their mother's father, not Lizzy's father. You might want to read this aloud and see if you can change this to end the confusion. I assumed they lived with her mother's father, but since it is Lizzy's father, her was a very unsympathetic character.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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I understand why you switched to the time she was in the house with the other nuns because Jody so reminded her of her own mother. This is well done for comparison. When you are speaking of Lizzy's mother and the two kids in the car, it seemed you were talking about their mother's father, not Lizzy's father. You might want to read this aloud and see if you can change this to end the confusion. I assumed they lived with her mother's father, but since it is Lizzy's father, her was a very unsympathetic character.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Yes he was a narcicist. Because we didn't put a placque of recognition on our wall, we went without, my mother had to scrimp and save. He has a building practically built in his name. They have a placque for him.
Comment from lyenochka
This post makes me so sad. I envision you, a young girl taking on the burden of your mother and brother, even thinking that somehow if you were sad, you could take away your mother's sadness. What a hard childhood emotionally. Also, you show the guilt of not showing any remnant of the soda and chips as you felt so sorry for your hungry mother sitting in the cold outside. I'm sure this experience affected your monastery interactions.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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This post makes me so sad. I envision you, a young girl taking on the burden of your mother and brother, even thinking that somehow if you were sad, you could take away your mother's sadness. What a hard childhood emotionally. Also, you show the guilt of not showing any remnant of the soda and chips as you felt so sorry for your hungry mother sitting in the cold outside. I'm sure this experience affected your monastery interactions.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your compassionate review. I'm sure it did go right along with my emotional posture for the convent. Even more patterns I was unaware of.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying getting to know Lizzy and what her home life was like as a child. It is interesting that the sister are living together in a house. Does that mean there is no Mother Seperior around? Do the sisters do their on cooking. What do they do during the day?
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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I'm enjoying getting to know Lizzy and what her home life was like as a child. It is interesting that the sister are living together in a house. Does that mean there is no Mother Seperior around? Do the sisters do their on cooking. What do they do during the day?
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your review. The mother superior was in the big house. As you might expect, we had many little ununassigned mother superiors in our little house...animal farm. We took turns cooking, good meals.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. I do see the resemblance to Animal Farm. It makes one wonder. I enjoyed reading.
One Sister in the small community was a composite of her father (sister)
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I do see the resemblance to Animal Farm. It makes one wonder. I enjoyed reading.
One Sister in the small community was a composite of her father (sister)
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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I enjoyed your appreciative review.
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Thank you for your appreciative review.