One Man's Calling
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ben is trying to pretend-fit in this scramble new world with the hope of making the wrongs right and saving some souls in the process:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Ben is trying to pretend-fit in this scramble new world with the hope of making the wrongs right and saving some souls in the process:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Wendy G
Every human endeavour so quickly leads to corruption. Well, Ben has made himself another enemy by calling out the mayor in public, but apart from needing extra eyes he will certainly have angelic protection as he continues to do God's will and stand up for right.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Every human endeavour so quickly leads to corruption. Well, Ben has made himself another enemy by calling out the mayor in public, but apart from needing extra eyes he will certainly have angelic protection as he continues to do God's will and stand up for right.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Thank you.
We need more Ben's in this world.
Comment from lyenochka
Good for Ben to be able to pepper the corrupt mayor with questions - not for answers but to reveal what has been really going on. Hope the mayor faces the consequences of his corruption.
I enjoyed your introducing the literary figures into your story. This time, they are not in court trial having to face accusations by characters who were killed off in their books!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Good for Ben to be able to pepper the corrupt mayor with questions - not for answers but to reveal what has been really going on. Hope the mayor faces the consequences of his corruption.
I enjoyed your introducing the literary figures into your story. This time, they are not in court trial having to face accusations by characters who were killed off in their books!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Hah! You remembered. I'm flattered.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
A young man such as Ben following God's call back in those days needed eyes in the back of his head. These days, he would need four extra eyes and a huge arsenal. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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A young man such as Ben following God's call back in those days needed eyes in the back of his head. These days, he would need four extra eyes and a huge arsenal. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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LOL 'Fraid you're right.
Thanks for the review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. It seems like our political situation happened in San Francisco. The mule story at the end was great. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. It seems like our political situation happened in San Francisco. The mule story at the end was great. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a very interesting chapter, Wayne, as we learn about SF politics and policing. Sounds like a very precarious situation. Vigilantism, although it may sound fine in theory, seldom works out as planned, and you've shown us how it often leads to corruption.
Once again, Ben Forest Gump Persons meets famous people during his travels. I love it.
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"'51 there was the first of the Committee of Vigilance. Their concentration was on the gangs." - I had to read this a few times until I got it. It was easy to miss the ' in front of 51 to know it was short for the year. It might have been a little clearer to have said, "In '51, there was..."
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In the following 3 paragraphs, something didn't quite make sense:
[Ben nodded agreement. "Almost like when you ask for applications, you should never hire those who apply."
"Or those who'd been arrested for violent crimes the week before."
Ben snapped his head around to see Henry respond by nodding the truth of it.] - Ben says the first one, then presumably Henry says the second one, but in the third one is Henry responding by nodding at his own statement? Or was it Ben who said the second one and Henry the first one, in which case, I wouldn't put "Ben nodded agreement" together on the same line as the quote.
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the governor signaled his aid that he was ready to leave - "aid" should be spelled "aide" here.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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This was a very interesting chapter, Wayne, as we learn about SF politics and policing. Sounds like a very precarious situation. Vigilantism, although it may sound fine in theory, seldom works out as planned, and you've shown us how it often leads to corruption.
Once again, Ben Forest Gump Persons meets famous people during his travels. I love it.
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"'51 there was the first of the Committee of Vigilance. Their concentration was on the gangs." - I had to read this a few times until I got it. It was easy to miss the ' in front of 51 to know it was short for the year. It might have been a little clearer to have said, "In '51, there was..."
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In the following 3 paragraphs, something didn't quite make sense:
[Ben nodded agreement. "Almost like when you ask for applications, you should never hire those who apply."
"Or those who'd been arrested for violent crimes the week before."
Ben snapped his head around to see Henry respond by nodding the truth of it.] - Ben says the first one, then presumably Henry says the second one, but in the third one is Henry responding by nodding at his own statement? Or was it Ben who said the second one and Henry the first one, in which case, I wouldn't put "Ben nodded agreement" together on the same line as the quote.
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the governor signaled his aid that he was ready to leave - "aid" should be spelled "aide" here.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Thank you.
The nodding part 'was' hard to follow. Thank you for pointing it out.
Hard to imagine how fluid it was at the writing, as well as the read through. Grrrrr.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Ben meets some interesting people and finds that Samuel Clemens can talk a story as much as he can. California has a lot of less than honest people that need to hear the words that Ben says. You have one sentence I don't understand: . . . not a flection of the borrowed . . .
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Ben meets some interesting people and finds that Samuel Clemens can talk a story as much as he can. California has a lot of less than honest people that need to hear the words that Ben says. You have one sentence I don't understand: . . . not a flection of the borrowed . . .
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the nice review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
So now Ben is taking on the big wigs of a big city. Sometimes that gets you killed, especially in that era. He always seems so at ease with every situation - like, "I'll figure it out with God's help when the times comes."
We'll see if he figures it out (my guess is that he will) and how he will handle this new situation.
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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So now Ben is taking on the big wigs of a big city. Sometimes that gets you killed, especially in that era. He always seems so at ease with every situation - like, "I'll figure it out with God's help when the times comes."
We'll see if he figures it out (my guess is that he will) and how he will handle this new situation.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Hold on to your seat!
Thank you for your great review.
And be safe this week!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I think my knowledge of American history and social conditions is inadequate to analyse adequately this post. If you want it to appeal to an international audience, I think you will have to be more explicit in your writing. kay
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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I think my knowledge of American history and social conditions is inadequate to analyse adequately this post. If you want it to appeal to an international audience, I think you will have to be more explicit in your writing. kay
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Was it the names? or...?
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namrs certainly, but also explanation of what a Vigilance Committee is
Comment from royowen
Ben is bphobnobning with the normal folk, and waiting for the Lord to move the situation, he is a relaxed man of God, knowing he's not perfect but seemingly willing to do whatever God, which is the only way to serve God, good understanding of the ministry of men Wayne, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Ben is bphobnobning with the normal folk, and waiting for the Lord to move the situation, he is a relaxed man of God, knowing he's not perfect but seemingly willing to do whatever God, which is the only way to serve God, good understanding of the ministry of men Wayne, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much!