Panic Attack
No breath, overwhelmed!2 total reviews
Comment from BenThrone
As an asthmatic I absolutely relate to this poem. As a poet...I find myself wanting a bit more. This absolutely meets the requirements of the contest and effectively communicates its subject. I just think the subject could be explored more powerfully and evocatively using a less constrained form. Of course that is kind of the point of these challenges, I get that. What I am saying is there is some untapped potential that I'd like to see developed further. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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As an asthmatic I absolutely relate to this poem. As a poet...I find myself wanting a bit more. This absolutely meets the requirements of the contest and effectively communicates its subject. I just think the subject could be explored more powerfully and evocatively using a less constrained form. Of course that is kind of the point of these challenges, I get that. What I am saying is there is some untapped potential that I'd like to see developed further. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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I agree with you! I have been trying my hand at as many forms as possible for the experience. I have had episodes recently at night of being unable to catch my breath and thaw gave me the inspiration for this.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Panic Attack, has the proper formatting and mirrors some of the desperate physical maladies that occur during this type of momentary disorder.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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This 5-7-5, Panic Attack, has the proper formatting and mirrors some of the desperate physical maladies that occur during this type of momentary disorder.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you! I wasn't trying to treat this with humor as one of these episodes is frightening. hope you didn't find the picture humorous in any way.
