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Guided by Faith

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Can faith guide our path?

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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Emma is certainly hardheaded about doing things by herself. Fortunately, Seth is pretty good at guessing what she needs. She is very lucky she is only stiff. She probably has a nasty bruise across her chest from the seat belt.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Emma is very hardheaded but she will do some growing. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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A good chapter that shows family togetherness, along with the importance of friends. Emma got her father a very nice gift that will allow her parents to see the star gazing tour. Everyone enjoyed the meal and kept things light.

It is interesting how little Emma lives on, yet is very uncomfortable with anyone helping her.
Seth has a way of doing it that she accepts, even if it is reluctantly, at times. I hope that once Emma is better, she takes the this whole experience as a way of learning more about herself and what she is capable of, and that it is okay for friends to help friends.

A couple of things to consider:

*The scene at the dinner table: Emma frowned, before she faced her dad and smiled as she handed him an envelope. After he opens it, he hugs her. It seems out of sync.
I assume her mother is sitting next to her since she hugged her.

*This sounds confusing to me as to who is talking and why they aren't sure about Tuesday if they spoke to the doctor.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
    Thank you of the kind review and I will recheck that area. I often have to switch sequence.
reply by Pam (respa) on 17-Aug-2023
    You are very welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
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Well, it seems some romantic relationships have to start with a situation that requires complete dependence on the other. Seems like Emma needs this to realize how much she really does love Seth and how much he loves her. He is clearly sensitive to all her needs!

That's what Mom's do. Seth, (moms) just a plural here, not a possessive

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
    Thank you for the catch, again many reader didn't catch that. Not good. I appreciate the help.
reply by lyenochka on 16-Aug-2023
    I think Autocorrect programming was created by someone who doesn't know when to use apostrophes! You may have done it correctly but it could have changed it!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
    Possible. I have wondered about gremlins. LOL
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Another fine chapter with some great character developing dialogue.

You have created some great characters here. You wonder what else is wandering around in that big creative brain of yours?
D

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
    My brain is constantly thinking. Drives my husband crazy. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Seth sort of reminds me of a little puppy with his tail wagging, tongue hanging out slobbering, just waiting for any chance for attention from Emma. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
    Thank you for the kind review. He does want her attention.
Comment from Sanku
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Miss Emma Independence finally accepts that she needs help .It is very sweet of Seth to volunteer to be with her .ahe is slowly accepting his need for .very well written.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jim Wile
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This was a good chapter. It was well paced, and Emma had enough sense to allow the others to help her. She wants to show her independence but realizes she is hurt and seems to accept that she must take it easy, let others help her, and allow herself to heal.

Seth is just beginning to accept that he has strong feelings about Emma. He's still hung up on the 8-year age difference, but soon he will realize it just doesn't matter. No one else thinks it does. Well done. - Jim

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Barbara, this is another great chapter, and I like the way the story is progressing. Emma just won't let Seth come closer to her. I wonder what she's so afraid of. You use, 'grinned' a lot. There are many ways to say the same thing. Just a suggestion. Hugs, Ulla xx

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
    I will check the word grinned. Thank you for the heads up.
Comment from Wendy G
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She is fiercely independent but may have to accept help for a while. The age difference is not that significant in the big scheme of things, as they will doubtless find out. Another well written chapter, and an enjoyable read.
Wendy

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
    Emma knows it but Seth struggles because he helped raise his sister, who's the same age as Emma. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Yay, I get another chapter right away. One benefit of being behind on reviewing!

Poor, fiercely independent Emma! She just can't let Seth close enough to get close, but he has his reservations, too. Thank goodness for Ace!

Nothing like a purposeful car accident to draw them all together.

Your descriptions were very helpful in letting us feel Emma's pain. You set the scene nicely.

A great chapter,

Hugs,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.