Comment from Andrea Kepple

Excellent

I think your poem can speak to readers on several different levels depending on what they are bringing to the poem. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023

Thank you so much. That is always the hope. That others get something from a poem.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Yes, the mist exists. Is it healing? I guess it could be and certainly would be if the one getting wet has that belief!

Good entry for this contest and I wish you well with it.

This may be a matter of taste, but I'm wondering if the article 'The' is necessary. I note that you do without any article at the start of line 2. The potential benefit is that you get one more syllable to play with...

Steve

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023

You're right. Thank you. I focused so much on the syllables that I felt somewhat restricted.

Comment from Theresa Honnigford

Exceptional

I really thought this was excellent work. The imagery was captivating. The symbolism that I read was amazing. Very readable. Syllable count seems fine. Good work. Theresa H.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023

Thank you, Theresa. That is encouraging.

reply by Theresa Honnigford on 12-Jun-2023

You're welcome 😊

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A powerful write as this water is having healing powesin your magical 5-7-5. The sea is a mighty force to be reckoned with, I enjoyed your presentation, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023

Thank you for seeing that in the poem. I was going for exactly what you saw. Thanks.