Dangerous Night Games
Who has the greater motive and plan?27 total reviews
Comment from DragonSkulls
This piece really should be doing a lot better in this contest, Carol. I loved the twist at the end, it not being the 'right' murderer. Lol. As far as spelling and grammar, I can't find any issues. I know we're suppose mention anything we could add but this great just the way it is. Excellent piece, Carol. I meant to give you sixer ever since you first posted it but I've been rather lacking in my reviewing lately. Lol. Best of luck, C.
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Ron
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This piece really should be doing a lot better in this contest, Carol. I loved the twist at the end, it not being the 'right' murderer. Lol. As far as spelling and grammar, I can't find any issues. I know we're suppose mention anything we could add but this great just the way it is. Excellent piece, Carol. I meant to give you sixer ever since you first posted it but I've been rather lacking in my reviewing lately. Lol. Best of luck, C.
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Ron
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
It seems this was a dangerous night game, for sure!
Tara was mistaken but seemingly took another prowler rapist off the streets.
Unfortunately, now she has a thirst for killing with revenge for her sister instilled deep in her mind. Eerily dark! I loved it! Best, JohnC
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It seems this was a dangerous night game, for sure!
Tara was mistaken but seemingly took another prowler rapist off the streets.
Unfortunately, now she has a thirst for killing with revenge for her sister instilled deep in her mind. Eerily dark! I loved it! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
Comment from jenintorre
This a great story in just 200 words, no words wasted. I loved the surprise ending and her nonchalant thoughts at the end.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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This a great story in just 200 words, no words wasted. I loved the surprise ending and her nonchalant thoughts at the end.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your kindness and the thoughtful review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from JSD
Whoops! Great end and a really tight piece of writing; most enjoyable. Your characters are instantly recognisable and the description you imply is graphic and stark. Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Whoops! Great end and a really tight piece of writing; most enjoyable. Your characters are instantly recognisable and the description you imply is graphic and stark. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your kindness and the thoughtful review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, it's always great to see one of your posts pop up in my inbox. I always miss reading your stories when you take time off. Welcome back! It's always a pleasure. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Wow, it's always great to see one of your posts pop up in my inbox. I always miss reading your stories when you take time off. Welcome back! It's always a pleasure. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Hello darlin'.... I've traveled some dark roads and still might take a wrong turn or two, but I am beyond happy to be back and attempting to write again. Baby steps in the right direction, for sure. Not much meat in a flash but they do have their challenges. Glad you enjoyed.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
She's Back! I hope. This was definitely suspenseful. The man envisioned Tara struggling in terror. He squeezed her throat. Surprise! He was not the man who killed her sister, but he was the man who tried to kill her. Great story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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She's Back! I hope. This was definitely suspenseful. The man envisioned Tara struggling in terror. He squeezed her throat. Surprise! He was not the man who killed her sister, but he was the man who tried to kill her. Great story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Hello, my lovely Lorraine. Like Hansel and Gretal, I find myself leaving little crumbs with these short flash fictions, hoping I can build myself back up into writing again. Thank you for all your kindness and comments. Sending my love and appreciation your way... Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written entry for the Another 200 Word Flash Fiction contest. You used very good descriptive words. You had me sitting on the edge of my seat as I read it. Nice to see you posting on here again. love and blessings, Teri
I love your profile picture!!!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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This is a very well written entry for the Another 200 Word Flash Fiction contest. You used very good descriptive words. You had me sitting on the edge of my seat as I read it. Nice to see you posting on here again. love and blessings, Teri
I love your profile picture!!!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Oh how I feel blessed! Your words touch me and especially "sitting on the edge of your seat." Only weeks ago, I thought I would never find my way back to writing again, but God led me to where I needed to be. It's a been a bumpy road but I am hopefully for a brighter horizon. Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi,
I absolutely love this post! It was exciting, to the point and had an unexpected ending, all hallmarks of great flash fiction.
You may not have posted I awhile, but this one was amazing.
I wish you best of luck in the contest,
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Hi,
I absolutely love this post! It was exciting, to the point and had an unexpected ending, all hallmarks of great flash fiction.
You may not have posted I awhile, but this one was amazing.
I wish you best of luck in the contest,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Only weeks ago, I thought I would never write again. You have no idea how blessed I feel by your review and the "stars". Thank you so much Rhonda. I'm smiling once again. Hugs and many thank yous, of course. Carol
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Carol, it would be a shame for you to stop writing. You?re a blessing! I look forward to more from you!
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love the twist at the end, but even though it was the wrong man, this one deserved to be killed, anyway!! At least there is one murderer off the streets now. But, she still has to find the killer of her sister. Excellent, my friend, it's so good to have you back. Love and hugs. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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I love the twist at the end, but even though it was the wrong man, this one deserved to be killed, anyway!! At least there is one murderer off the streets now. But, she still has to find the killer of her sister. Excellent, my friend, it's so good to have you back. Love and hugs. Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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It's so gooooood to be back and to see your smiling face. Baby steps to get myself back into the swing of writing but it feels awesome. I truly appreciate your thoughts and comments.
Love and hugs to you, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is a great flash. No doubt, even though she killed the wrong men, this one deserved to die too. Where have you been? I think of you often and I pray the drama in your life isn't so bad you can't cope. Are you ready to begin again?
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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This is a great flash. No doubt, even though she killed the wrong men, this one deserved to die too. Where have you been? I think of you often and I pray the drama in your life isn't so bad you can't cope. Are you ready to begin again?
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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I am ready to Begin Again, Beth. It's been a rough road and only weeks ago I thought I'd never write again, but God had different plans. Visited my granddaughter in NC and ended up in the hospital. The staff were beyond awesome and discovered things my drs at home never even considered. But I am here now and hoping I get into the swing of thing as we go. Thanks for your kindness.
Hugs, Carol