Tanka Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 161 "Wrapped in Pain"Romantic Tanka Poems
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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
my Gypsy Queen.
Didn't know whether to smile-laugh, cry, or let the emotion run over me as I thought to myself... "self, it's only a matter of time and mind with a heaped-healthy serving of perspective."
A beautifully composed, constructed and presented Gogyohka poem... and the added visual application of the words drifting, 'to be washed away offshore'. It somehow comforted me as I connected to these words, as yet another smile passed my lips as I saw the notes... well, more the proverb and realised this could mean only one thing. The deep connection goes both ways.
Thank you!
With our thoughts we create...
the tools to be as fluid as water.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Hi MariVal,
my Gypsy Queen.
Didn't know whether to smile-laugh, cry, or let the emotion run over me as I thought to myself... "self, it's only a matter of time and mind with a heaped-healthy serving of perspective."
A beautifully composed, constructed and presented Gogyohka poem... and the added visual application of the words drifting, 'to be washed away offshore'. It somehow comforted me as I connected to these words, as yet another smile passed my lips as I saw the notes... well, more the proverb and realised this could mean only one thing. The deep connection goes both ways.
Thank you!
With our thoughts we create...
the tools to be as fluid as water.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Hello, James, I always get happy when I see your name amidst my reviews. I hope you are feeling better.
Not many reviewed this poem, probably because the title is too real, but I wrote it for a close friend of mine who deals with pain every day. I believe you know him too. ;)
Anyway, I am happy you like it and I appreciate your exceptional six stars review. Thank you, James.
Gypsy super hugs
"Smile, breathe, and go slowly." - Thich Nhat Hanh
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Ah Thich Nhat Hanh knows me so well!
I do hope your 'close friend' learns that acceptance is the first stage of greater harmony toward a better life.
Just breathe~~~~~~~~~~~ breathe out...
We are strong enough to handle our challenges, wise enough to find a solution to our problems and capable enough to do whatever needs to be done to allow a harmonic co-existence. Hmmmmmm, I better start listening to myself?
I'm taking those super hugs, it cold here today!
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acceptance is a hard one, it reminds me of an AA prayer...
"God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, The courage to change the things I can, And the wisdom to know the difference. "
I am sending you some Los Angeles sunshine your way...
besitos y abrazos
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was such a mood poem. To have the pain of life washed away. A brilliant image of the tide coming in and physically lifting the pain. Washing the sands clean. Beautiful poem and beautiful form. Gretchen
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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This was such a mood poem. To have the pain of life washed away. A brilliant image of the tide coming in and physically lifting the pain. Washing the sands clean. Beautiful poem and beautiful form. Gretchen
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you, Gretchen :)
Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Wouldn't it be wonderful if all pain in the world would disappear? I think so. Thank you for sharing this package with us. It's beautiful from artwork to the poem.
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Wouldn't it be wonderful if all pain in the world would disappear? I think so. Thank you for sharing this package with us. It's beautiful from artwork to the poem.
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----and cool picture at the end, reflects the pain of mental desolation very well----we're our own worst enemy--at least from the neck up!
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----and cool picture at the end, reflects the pain of mental desolation very well----we're our own worst enemy--at least from the neck up!
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso
Comment from shelley kaye
love how you did the fifth line... adds to the imagery of the sand castles being washed away
great word choices and flow
cool pic and colour scheme
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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love how you did the fifth line... adds to the imagery of the sand castles being washed away
great word choices and flow
cool pic and colour scheme
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Gogyohka poem- good picture presentation- I like the Buddhist proverb!! Nice!
Poem tell a story of pain - waiting to be washed away - still choosing to suffer- optional- while waiting- good analogy- fragile sand castles- good job AP
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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I like your Gogyohka poem- good picture presentation- I like the Buddhist proverb!! Nice!
Poem tell a story of pain - waiting to be washed away - still choosing to suffer- optional- while waiting- good analogy- fragile sand castles- good job AP
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Your poetry is so polished professional and beautiful on so many levels
It's always a pleasure to view and review your mastery of both word and chosen style.
The presentation is a perfect fit creating a perfect whole.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Your poetry is so polished professional and beautiful on so many levels
It's always a pleasure to view and review your mastery of both word and chosen style.
The presentation is a perfect fit creating a perfect whole.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you very much, Shirley, I really appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We suffer pain in many ways in life and our attitude to it can either make it worse or make it bearable, it is always our own choice, a poignant write. Things we cannot change we have to accept, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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We suffer pain in many ways in life and our attitude to it can either make it worse or make it bearable, it is always our own choice, a poignant write. Things we cannot change we have to accept, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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That's true. I had a friend in mind. He suffers from chronic pain.
Thank you very much, dolly.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That's the unfortunate thing about life on earth and living in a fallen world, we cannot avoid pain in our lives but we can wait for all of it to be washed away when we go to Heaven.
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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That's the unfortunate thing about life on earth and living in a fallen world, we cannot avoid pain in our lives but we can wait for all of it to be washed away when we go to Heaven.
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Yes, that's true. Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. I was thinking of a friend who is in constant pain.
Love,
Marival