Comment from eliz100

Excellent

This is an excellent chapter. It was enjoyable from beginning to end. Your setting description is right on.I am looking forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 20-May-2023

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reply by the author on 21-May-2023

Thank you.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh no! Poor Ben hasn't fully recovered and Salinger and his men are out to kill him and lure him by having kidnapped Livvy. Now why do we always have to have a poor woman needing to be rescued? I sure hope Livvy has developed some spunk since the time Ben rescued her. It's not looking good for the hero and his his friends...

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Thank you for your great review.
Looks like I have fallen into the dreaded male/female plot cliche'. But I'm afraid Salinger is that shallow a person.
Best wishes.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

How evil Salinger is. I can just imagine Livvy's terror. Ben will definitely need God to be acting on his behalf this time! Looking forward to seeing how this plays out.
Wendy

 Comment Written 14-May-2023

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reply by the author on 15-May-2023

Thank you for your very kind review.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Ben seems to be doing well enough to do his job, with Red's help. The mine the bad guys stashed Livvy in is almost certainly on the trail Ben follows. Ben needs to save her before Salinger gets hold of her, and surely God will help him here. Two things you might want to change: . . . in (having) kicked out . . . and . . . twenty (burros) . . .

 Comment Written 14-May-2023

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you for your very kind review.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

You portray the feel of the West so well in this chapter. Dark but with promise. A perfect setting for someone like Ben, who has all the human frailties of "suffering . . . when he acted on his own, ahead of God." There is a first century Pauline quality about the character Ben ... so full of enthusiam for God, yet all too human.

 Comment Written 14-May-2023

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you for your super review.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Exceptional

"See those [burrows]?" Shouldn't this be burro's?
Same here." pack it into [burrow] burro packs,"
Burrow is a ditch dug in the ground. Burro is an animal .
Oh, Salinger is treading on shifting sands messing with Livvy. Poor girl. Totally innocent being put thru Hell because of an outlaws wrath. Well done. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 14-May-2023

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you for your great review.
And thank you for the six stars!

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

It seems the Lord always sends Ben to the place Salinger will be. I hope Ben asked for guidance before going out on his own and doing something rash. I don't like seeing him get beat nearly to death.

 Comment Written 14-May-2023

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you for your great review.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This chapter was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed Sabbath Sunday.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 14-May-2023

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Tank you for your very nice review.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

As ever, clear, well constructed prose. Salinger still plotting Ben's death, now has Livvy kidnapped as bait for Ben. They're a despicable, lawless bunch! And Ben is very vulnerable right now because Salinger is scheming his murder under the guise of self-defence. Thanks for sharing, Wayne. Debbie

 Comment Written 14-May-2023

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you very much for your kind review.