Love and Loss
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Sunflower"NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest
38 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
Very touching and mimics my son's death and my wife's suicide.
This was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
And you're right the very your child is a parent's worst nightmare.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
There's not too much you can say about something like this except to pray about it and realize that she's in a better place than both you and me.
Thanks for sharing this Jessica and have a Blessed Sabbath Sunday.
Doctor Ricky 1024
"Still Preaching to the Choir here at Fanstory"
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
Very touching and mimics my son's death and my wife's suicide.
This was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
And you're right the very your child is a parent's worst nightmare.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
There's not too much you can say about something like this except to pray about it and realize that she's in a better place than both you and me.
Thanks for sharing this Jessica and have a Blessed Sabbath Sunday.
Doctor Ricky 1024
"Still Preaching to the Choir here at Fanstory"
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thank you so much, that means so much to me. I'm so sorry for your losses.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from JT traveller
Beautiful, emotive poem and a fitting tribute to your cousin. Thank you for sharing a piece of your soul with all of us. Love everything about this poem. The bright colours and the name. Great work.
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
Beautiful, emotive poem and a fitting tribute to your cousin. Thank you for sharing a piece of your soul with all of us. Love everything about this poem. The bright colours and the name. Great work.
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xoxo
Comment from Rosemarie L Tharp
I did not expect that twist. This truly made me tear up especially reading your about section at the end. I'm very sorry for you loss.
"Plucked like a sunflower right in her prime" wonderfully calls back to that great image you painted in the beginning: beautiful and full of life, yet gone all to soon. How carelessly we take and how carelessly things are taken from us.
May her light continue to shine on you, even if only from above.
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
I did not expect that twist. This truly made me tear up especially reading your about section at the end. I'm very sorry for you loss.
"Plucked like a sunflower right in her prime" wonderfully calls back to that great image you painted in the beginning: beautiful and full of life, yet gone all to soon. How carelessly we take and how carelessly things are taken from us.
May her light continue to shine on you, even if only from above.
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you so much. Your kind words are greatly appreciated!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from JLR
Jessica, what an endearing lament in perfect rhyme for your departed soul friend. My condolences to you and to her husband, who will carry a burden on his heart to his grave. I am out sixes -- so here is a virtual SIX!!
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
Jessica, what an endearing lament in perfect rhyme for your departed soul friend. My condolences to you and to her husband, who will carry a burden on his heart to his grave. I am out sixes -- so here is a virtual SIX!!
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you so much! Your words mean a lot to me- your virtual Six, as well!
Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Only are you getting five stars, because I am out of sixes. I am crying at both lovely posts so I can barely see and write hru the tears! Once again I am so sorry for your loses. I do love monorhymes and you did a beautiful job w the rhymes and meter. Great job on this poignant poem for your cousin
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
Only are you getting five stars, because I am out of sixes. I am crying at both lovely posts so I can barely see and write hru the tears! Once again I am so sorry for your loses. I do love monorhymes and you did a beautiful job w the rhymes and meter. Great job on this poignant poem for your cousin
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you, my friend! Xoxoxo
Comment from lyenochka
What a beautiful tribute to your cousin! I'm so sorry that she was taken to heave too soon and it could have been avoided had her husband been responsible. I guess he will indeed be haunted for the rest of his life. Loved how your started with the sun and the sunflower and ended with the sunflower and the "brightest star."
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
What a beautiful tribute to your cousin! I'm so sorry that she was taken to heave too soon and it could have been avoided had her husband been responsible. I guess he will indeed be haunted for the rest of his life. Loved how your started with the sun and the sunflower and ended with the sunflower and the "brightest star."
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you!! I appreciate your perceptive review and I'm honored you enjoyed my poem!
Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica,
This is a smoothly metered and well rhymed poem in honor of your cousin and friend Megan. Sorry for your and your family's loss. I like the metaphor of the sunflower for her light. It is apt since it was her favorite flower.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
Hi Jessica,
This is a smoothly metered and well rhymed poem in honor of your cousin and friend Megan. Sorry for your and your family's loss. I like the metaphor of the sunflower for her light. It is apt since it was her favorite flower.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Joan!
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You are most kindly welcome, Jessica.
Joan
Comment from shelley kaye
aw this poem was a very special way of telling your friend you love and miss her
beautifully heartfelt word choices with smooth rhyme and flow
may i suggest a blue background and yellow font to blend with the cool pic? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and sorry for your loss
shelley :)
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
aw this poem was a very special way of telling your friend you love and miss her
beautifully heartfelt word choices with smooth rhyme and flow
may i suggest a blue background and yellow font to blend with the cool pic? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and sorry for your loss
shelley :)
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Shelley!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and well written poem you have penned about what happened to your best friend/cousin. You used great descriptive words that are full of love and sadness. Your notes were very nice too. That is so neat about the perfect heart shaped birthmark! I am so sorry for your loss. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
This is a very beautiful and well written poem you have penned about what happened to your best friend/cousin. You used great descriptive words that are full of love and sadness. Your notes were very nice too. That is so neat about the perfect heart shaped birthmark! I am so sorry for your loss. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you, Teri! That means so much. Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from Heather Knight
I'm so sorry for your loss. I started reading this thinking it was going to be just a light poem about a beautiful flower and I didn't expect the tragedy that was to come.
How come people still haven't realized how dangerous it is to drive when drunk? Why do they get drunk in the first place?
Thanks for sharing this story with us. I hope writing the poem has been somewhat cathartic at least.
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
I'm so sorry for your loss. I started reading this thinking it was going to be just a light poem about a beautiful flower and I didn't expect the tragedy that was to come.
How come people still haven't realized how dangerous it is to drive when drunk? Why do they get drunk in the first place?
Thanks for sharing this story with us. I hope writing the poem has been somewhat cathartic at least.
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Heather. I know, I ask myself the same questions constantly.