MAN and HIS SHADOW
Love speaks louder than words5 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Graham,
This is a smoothly metered poem that could have been written in abcb quatrains that would emphasize the rhyme.
This has the well worked theme of how being good brings you along the narrow path to heaven in the end.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great week.
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2023
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Hi Graham,
This is a smoothly metered poem that could have been written in abcb quatrains that would emphasize the rhyme.
This has the well worked theme of how being good brings you along the narrow path to heaven in the end.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great week.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2023
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Dear Dragonpoet.
My apologies for very late comment back - since June I see. I did in fact comment back then but not being familiar with fanstory did not hit the return button properly. I have just worked out what abcb approach is. I have further tested myself where you need the abcb approach but with last word in each line of verse has to start the next line in a poem.
That aside thanks for your comment. blessings over Christmas period and for years ahead.
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You're welcome, Graham.
Hope you had a Merry Christmas and have a Happy New year.
Joan
Comment from Yardier
You nailed it with that one, brother! Clear, succinct and the whole truth.
You may find the following video regarding God's assembly in heaven revealing: https://tubitv.com/movies/726050/the-unseen-realm
Blessings, Yard
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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You nailed it with that one, brother! Clear, succinct and the whole truth.
You may find the following video regarding God's assembly in heaven revealing: https://tubitv.com/movies/726050/the-unseen-realm
Blessings, Yard
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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I liked your comment and photo Yardier. I think I am nearer to that age myself.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
This is a lovely poem very well put together has some great rhyming it has a great message too!
It is sweet and meaningful powerful and hopeful. Well done!
I can find no grammatical errors no spelling punctuation or sentence structure errors either is very well done to play very talented hand.
I would suggest a picture or illustration to go with your Palm to draw the eye of the committee that you. Might? Be ranked. Higher and deserved of your work. I thank you for your submission good luck in the contest and have an awesome evening!
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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This is a lovely poem very well put together has some great rhyming it has a great message too!
It is sweet and meaningful powerful and hopeful. Well done!
I can find no grammatical errors no spelling punctuation or sentence structure errors either is very well done to play very talented hand.
I would suggest a picture or illustration to go with your Palm to draw the eye of the committee that you. Might? Be ranked. Higher and deserved of your work. I thank you for your submission good luck in the contest and have an awesome evening!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you Lea
Blessings
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Hi Doctor Ricky
Thank you for reading and comment
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Love does speak louder than words, and your words reflect that love, divinely inspired and freely given by God. This is beautifully written, with clear imagery and great rhyming, but it is the message that shines bright and true. Thanks for sharing this with us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Love does speak louder than words, and your words reflect that love, divinely inspired and freely given by God. This is beautifully written, with clear imagery and great rhyming, but it is the message that shines bright and true. Thanks for sharing this with us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Hi Ginda
Appreciated your comments