Housewife
Tale of a housewife20 total reviews
Comment from Jim Wile
Very nice job, Jessica. It's hard to write such a long poem with so many rhymes for the "or" sound, but you did it beautifully. I can see why this won the contest. You very realistically described the life of a housewife--both how difficult but rewarding it can be. Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Very nice job, Jessica. It's hard to write such a long poem with so many rhymes for the "or" sound, but you did it beautifully. I can see why this won the contest. You very realistically described the life of a housewife--both how difficult but rewarding it can be. Great job!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much, Jim!
Comment from mermaids
Your poem reads like a movie, life turned out pretty good for this housewife. You have a smooth poetic flow of words and lines that makes this a fun poem to read out loud. I admire your ability to come up with the same end rhyme in all lines.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Your poem reads like a movie, life turned out pretty good for this housewife. You have a smooth poetic flow of words and lines that makes this a fun poem to read out loud. I admire your ability to come up with the same end rhyme in all lines.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your feedback!
Comment from Thesis
That was well written. You've provided a chronological story that captures each phase of how this woman's life evolved. You've taken her from innocence, incorporated many emotions, and provided a summary of how she felt about her journey. Nice job.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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That was well written. You've provided a chronological story that captures each phase of how this woman's life evolved. You've taken her from innocence, incorporated many emotions, and provided a summary of how she felt about her journey. Nice job.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Wow thank you so much!
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is one very cool poem, and of course, I am out of sixes. I do think it will do very well in the contest, and good luck. Your writing is as outstanding as your ability to tell a story in a poem. Exceptional. Terry.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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This is one very cool poem, and of course, I am out of sixes. I do think it will do very well in the contest, and good luck. Your writing is as outstanding as your ability to tell a story in a poem. Exceptional. Terry.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Terry! So much!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love, love, love this one! It is so true to life. What we all start out wanting to get out of our lives, most of us realise we've ended up with something so much more valuable. That some don't see it that way, is really their loss, because to be responsible for another life is something that is incredibly important. The rewards so much greater. Very well done, this is a fabulous contest entry and you've managed to keep within the rules for the monorhyme. Good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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I love, love, love this one! It is so true to life. What we all start out wanting to get out of our lives, most of us realise we've ended up with something so much more valuable. That some don't see it that way, is really their loss, because to be responsible for another life is something that is incredibly important. The rewards so much greater. Very well done, this is a fabulous contest entry and you've managed to keep within the rules for the monorhyme. Good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thank you so so much, Sandra!!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the Monorhyme contest. The text is a nice size. The poem reads like a narrative poem. The storyline makes sense and has all the key elements of a good story from exposition to resolution. Your visual fits well too. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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This is a good entry to the Monorhyme contest. The text is a nice size. The poem reads like a narrative poem. The storyline makes sense and has all the key elements of a good story from exposition to resolution. Your visual fits well too. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
A very clever monorhyme, and you developed the story-line very well, describing not only events but her emotions and feelings, in a very realistic way. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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A very clever monorhyme, and you developed the story-line very well, describing not only events but her emotions and feelings, in a very realistic way. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much!!
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Very well written. Your rhyming and meter flows smoothly and makes an enjoyable read. Nicely done with the contest entry. Good luck on the contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Very well written. Your rhyming and meter flows smoothly and makes an enjoyable read. Nicely done with the contest entry. Good luck on the contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your feedback! :)
Comment from LisaMay
Your lengthy poem has much to enjoy within its lines; a tale of true life, thwarted ambition, lust, obligations, and the rewards of family life. Your choice of monorhyme gave you great scope to explore more and more.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Your lengthy poem has much to enjoy within its lines; a tale of true life, thwarted ambition, lust, obligations, and the rewards of family life. Your choice of monorhyme gave you great scope to explore more and more.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much :)
Comment from GWHARGIS
Awe. I remember the fear of finding out I was pregnant. Dad had disappeared. But I would never ever change that. It was one of the very best mistakes I ever made. I love how you wove this story in a poem. And at first I was afraid she was gonna call it quits. But she knew a good thing and like me, wouldn't change a thing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Awe. I remember the fear of finding out I was pregnant. Dad had disappeared. But I would never ever change that. It was one of the very best mistakes I ever made. I love how you wove this story in a poem. And at first I was afraid she was gonna call it quits. But she knew a good thing and like me, wouldn't change a thing. Gretchen
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much!! <3