A Poetic Pause
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Seasons End"First Poems
26 total reviews
Comment from Kaiku
the opening line is quite elegant and the picture you present is wonderful. There is only one area in the world where the Saguaro grows and that is in the parts of Arizona and Mexico. I am not sure the font being used truly reflects the wonderment of your words. Just my opinion.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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the opening line is quite elegant and the picture you present is wonderful. There is only one area in the world where the Saguaro grows and that is in the parts of Arizona and Mexico. I am not sure the font being used truly reflects the wonderment of your words. Just my opinion.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you I'll have a peek at it and thank you so much for your review. I really appreciate you taking the time to do this is very much Noted and I will certainly have a look at the phone so it's going on there. Thank you hope you have a great day!
Comment from Eternal Muse
A very lovely offering for the rhyming contest. Loved your imagery, visuals and a fantastic artistic presentation. Your words creative delightful picture for a reader and stay there.
I enjoyed it, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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A very lovely offering for the rhyming contest. Loved your imagery, visuals and a fantastic artistic presentation. Your words creative delightful picture for a reader and stay there.
I enjoyed it, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for reviewing for the time you took and for your comments. I'm very appreciated i'm glad you liked it have a great day!
Comment from w.j.debi
You make the contrasts of the fall season come to life as well as the reactions of creatures and even the Earth itself. Love the opening with the
tumbleweed roars and the Summer freeze.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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You make the contrasts of the fall season come to life as well as the reactions of creatures and even the Earth itself. Love the opening with the
tumbleweed roars and the Summer freeze.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so very much I'm so glad you liked it. I appreciate you taking the time to read it and to offer your thoughts and opinions always appreciate it here again. I thank you hope you have a wonderful day!
Comment from poetwatch
This is quite nice, Lea. :) The picture is beautiful and your words fill the page with its imagery. "Devoured feast," the weather taken over by change as the sun shines in the sky and brings forth the beauty of the earth, "Conquered beast." Beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This is quite nice, Lea. :) The picture is beautiful and your words fill the page with its imagery. "Devoured feast," the weather taken over by change as the sun shines in the sky and brings forth the beauty of the earth, "Conquered beast." Beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much I'm so glad you like it and then ta. He to review it and I'll be your comments thank you again. I hope you have a great day!
Comment from easyeverett1
Brilliant. You understand that poetic verse is, originally, musical verse. Your poem performs as music when read aloud. That, my friend, is quite a rare exception to the FS rule. lol I am impressed. easy
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Brilliant. You understand that poetic verse is, originally, musical verse. Your poem performs as music when read aloud. That, my friend, is quite a rare exception to the FS rule. lol I am impressed. easy
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so very much i'm really glad you liked it for your time and your comments always appreciated hope you have a great day!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lea,
This poem uses color and sound to give strong images of nature as Summer turns to Fall. I like the original metaphor of Fall as a Summer freeze.
I also like the image of an eagle flying in the sunset.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Hi Lea,
This poem uses color and sound to give strong images of nature as Summer turns to Fall. I like the original metaphor of Fall as a Summer freeze.
I also like the image of an eagle flying in the sunset.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Joan thank you so much you're always so kind and and thoughtful. I always appreciate it and I'll continue to do so and I'm also just as good. I'm happy to receive any constructive criticism because it can only be for the better! Thank you again have a great day!
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Don't mention it, Lea.
Joan
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This poem reflects the turn of the season and all the colours and sounds of Autumn. The picture complements the poem. The language appeals very much to the senses!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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This poem reflects the turn of the season and all the colours and sounds of Autumn. The picture complements the poem. The language appeals very much to the senses!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much Sarah for having to look at my home. I really appreciate you taking the time it's rough very nice thank you again hope you have a great day
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Allbest wishes!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I love this colors, too. Your poem of the alternating between long/short lines work well here. It's neat and poetic. I love to read more of your poems in the future.
Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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I love this colors, too. Your poem of the alternating between long/short lines work well here. It's neat and poetic. I love to read more of your poems in the future.
Well done.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much that's very kind of you to say. I really appreciate you taking the time to look at my poem and offer your comments. As alwanytime you wish you are welcome to look at anything I written as I will watch out for yours. Thank you again have a great evening!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the Rhyming Poetry contest. The text is a great size for easy reading. The message is written with clarity and is easy to understand. This poem is riddled with examples of personification beginning with roaring tumbleweeds and shouting gophers. Great examples!
The text needs to be balanced in the poem box. Drop the first line down one or two spaces to match the ending space beneath the last line. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the Rhyming Poetry contest. The text is a great size for easy reading. The message is written with clarity and is easy to understand. This poem is riddled with examples of personification beginning with roaring tumbleweeds and shouting gophers. Great examples!
The text needs to be balanced in the poem box. Drop the first line down one or two spaces to match the ending space beneath the last line. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my phone off of your suggestions and your comments are all very welcome. I appreciate you taking the time to review it and wish you the best evening!
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Comment from lyenochka
A lovely poem celebrating the seasons. I like how you alternated the longer rhyming lines with the three-syllable rhyming lines. It's sad to say goodbye to Summer but we can enjoy the colors of Fall and look forward to Spring conquering the beast of Winter. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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A lovely poem celebrating the seasons. I like how you alternated the longer rhyming lines with the three-syllable rhyming lines. It's sad to say goodbye to Summer but we can enjoy the colors of Fall and look forward to Spring conquering the beast of Winter. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words and for taking the time to review my poem and for taking the time to review my poem and for taking the time. To review my poem and for your comments. I'm very much appreciative you're gonna hope you have the best evening!
