Joseph Star Love
love expressed in Joseph Star form3 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
To point out again.. now you have the one syllable at the end yet unfortunately the second last line should have three syllables. So the syllable count is 1, 3, 5, 7, 7, 5, 3, 1.
Blessings,
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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To point out again.. now you have the one syllable at the end yet unfortunately the second last line should have three syllables. So the syllable count is 1, 3, 5, 7, 7, 5, 3, 1.
Blessings,
Rebekka x
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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hmm I will review the rules thanks
Comment from Rickie1
Six stars for the photo and reminding me what the first flush of falling in love felt like. Then the trap snaps shut after taking the bait delighted to be caught. :-) Rickie
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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Six stars for the photo and reminding me what the first flush of falling in love felt like. Then the trap snaps shut after taking the bait delighted to be caught. :-) Rickie
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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thanks a lot for your comments and I like the way you put it would make a great little poem
Comment from JT traveller
I enjoyed your poem. The words "Just marriage", left me feeling a little lost. They did not seem to fit with the rest of your romantically spun tale.
Perhaps the fault lies with me, but "Just marriage" seemed rather a non descript way to conclude what otherwise could have been a fantastic piece of writing.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed your poem. The words "Just marriage", left me feeling a little lost. They did not seem to fit with the rest of your romantically spun tale.
Perhaps the fault lies with me, but "Just marriage" seemed rather a non descript way to conclude what otherwise could have been a fantastic piece of writing.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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i need to revise it a bit last line is supposed to be one syllable.
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Wed? 😊🇦🇺