Comment from bob cullen

Excellent

This is so rhythmical. I can almost hear the melody to accompany this. I can almost hear the Beatle's Liverpool sound in this. I think we're from around the same era. I'm an Aussie '48 model.
In my mind, I think I can distinguish perhaps a McCartney influence in the lyric. Really great.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2024

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Your grandmother sounded like she knew how to have a good time. It was probably very theraputic to her as well. I liked this children's poem mainly because it encouraged them to be silly. To enjoy the sound of their own voice and to break free of the structure of life. Great job on this. Gretchen

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Thanks so very much.......these are fun to to slam bang together...I grew up with silly Irishmen.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Mintybee

Excellent

This poem comments on the fun of silly made up stuff, and then delivers silly made up stuff. I see it's for the children's poetry contest. I have two young children, and they do enjoy making up their own nonsense words to sing and chant. The rhyme and meter were good. Nice entry!
Mintybee

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Thanks so much.....I always loved the rough and tumble of garbled together tunes....somewhere between Vaudeville and Tin Pan Alley.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Mark Kuglin

Excellent

Nicely done.

That was very creative, catchy and rhymed well. And the latter with words you don't often see.

You captured a melodic cadence which was nice.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks so very much.....these are fun to wiggle together.....not really contenders but chasing the top twenty.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

reply by Mark Kuglin on 11-Feb-2023

My pleasure, Stu.

I fully understand.

I write some stories or poems just to amuse myself...My first piece here is one of them.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

I think your grandmother was brilliant! Silly songs are a staple in my house...more "Jabberwocky" with a made-up melody than anything we could sing out more than once in the same way! This gave my kids (and now grandkids) the freedom to create and soar on the joy of music! I'd love to see this read to a circle of children ~ and then have them rise in unison each warbling as their hearts inspire!

Karenina

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks so much.....these are thrown together while banging on a keyboard.....most of my entries are nonsense....But fun....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

reply by karenina on 11-Feb-2023

Godspeed to you as well!

Comment from jacquelyn popp

Excellent

Great poem. Nicely done. This is a cute poem, and I like that it gives kids the ok to sing any words they choose. Your poem gives excellent advice or children and adults too. Your poem is a sweet poem that is backed by a sweet idea. Your poem made me smile when I read it with the use of all its silly words. This is a wonderful children's poem, and I enjoyed reading it. Well written with your flow of words, and rhyming pattern. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks so very much...lots of fun with these little "weird" guys....keeps the old man from fading away too fast...HAHA.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Stu,
This is a cute poem which gives kids the okay to sing any words they choose and know they are making good music. I like the bit of fantasy and religion in this poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks so very much.....these are scripted while banging a keyboard....a little hard scrabble but always fun.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

reply by dragonpoet on 11-Feb-2023

Don't mention it, Stu.
Have a great weekend.
Joan

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I think your poem offers excellent advice for children and adults alike. I will occasionally sing a tune made up on the spot, which always causes those around me to laugh:-)

A terrific rhyming poem, and I love that your grandmother did this with you.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks so much....a lot of my entries are like this....sort of bash 'em thrash 'em squiggly wiggly.....but great fun....breathless race to the top twenty..HAHA.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Paul McFarland

Excellent

Nice children's poem. I was going to criticize your meter, but it fits right in with the craziness of your poem. it will be interesting to see how you do in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks so much..you are right..these are rather sloppy...unkempt as grandma would say.... but lots of fun to bundle up and launch to the platform.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That's a fun song to spark the imagination of children, especially those who are blessed with parents who read them about Elven Kings and sing with them. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks so much for your thoughts.... a little raspy, gaspy but fun for the old guy.....Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell