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Random Rhyme and Petty Prose

Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Widow"
a collection of phenomenally mundane work.

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Comment from Father Flaps
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Hi Bill,
I think Sam should have taken the hint and moved on before Widow Maycurr dumped a bucket of water on his head. In the last line, we learn that Sam was a minister. That might explain his persistence, to a point.
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2023
    Thanks, Kimbob
Comment from Spitfire
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A good cliffhanger here with the reader wondering why the widow would be scary to Satan. Of course, the bucket is full of urine but that smell wouldn't deter the devil I'm guessing.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    I guess I'll work on Widow 2.
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Hah! Bill!
Smiles all around!
Loved your description and witty dialogue!
Reminded me of when I was in college...a group of students had had it with the head RA's son, so when he walked under the doorway to the dorm, they did to him what Widow Maycurr did to your parson! Kid never bothered anyone every again... at least to my knowledge!

Thank you for sharing!
diane

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    Thanks, Diane, for giving this a look.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Well, this is intriguing!! I need it to be a chapter in a book! I don't want this to be IT, Bill Schott!! This is totally not fair. I'm invested here, and you're kind of doing a Bernie Madoff!! Why is the widow being THAT level of onery? Simply not answering wasn't enough? She had to DOUSE the poor sap?

As you can see, I gave this much thought after finishing it, so that speaks volumes about what a good write it is. But, still...I'm way too invested to be done. Please, Suh, may I have a bit mow-uh?

xoxox

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    I will think of something. Thank you for the motivation.
reply by Rachelle Allen on 15-Jan-2023
    Thank you for the awesome read!! xo
Comment from Ulla
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Hehehe, I love this. Bill. So much for God and Satan. Some humans are fearless of them and and put the fright into them. So now , Sam is wet. What is he going to do? Ulla :)))

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    Looks like he will fail.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Ha ha ha, a woman to be reckoned with is it? Ha ha ha. When my daughter was growing up and only 11 years old, some friends of hers poured water over her from an upstairs window. She never ever forgave them and her birthday was coming up and she vowed she would not invite them to her party and she didn't. Friends don't do things like that she said and I saw in her some strength, a fine write Bill, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    Dirty tricks from friends cut deep.
Comment from BethShelby
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I got a chuckle out of this one. It sounds as though the fellow passing by has had some experience with the widow. She much really be a challenge if the parson would have more luck at the fight club down the street. I wonder if that armour kept the good preacher dry.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    In every life a little bath water must fall.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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I loved the chuckle you gave us to finish off your little story Bill. The Parson obviously didn't know the reputation of this widow. Well told Bill, leaving me with a smile. Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    Thank you, Valda, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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An excellent story that is well-complemented by the barred door. I thought it was going to be a chamber pot that was poured over Sam's head. Would that have been too obvious. kay

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    Thank you, Kay.
Comment from nomi338
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Sam needs to take some excellent advise and keep it moving. If the widow is tougher than Satan, she is not to be messed with. Sam had better trap his gun of righteousness on to his chest, and go fight the good fight against an opponent that will give him a fighting chance.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2023
    Thanks. nomi