Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

I person is what they believe they are. Change your thoughts and change your world. It really does help not to think negative thoughts. It takes practice, but it can be done. Nice writing.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023

Thanks. It?s still being edited.

Comment from Karyn2

Excellent

Our minds can certainly conjure up some awful things about ourselves and at times try to convince us these lies are true. Our feelings can often let us down, convince us we are inadequate and slide into our minds and beings and take over the rational voice that reminds us of our worth and value. I enjoyed the way this poem flows and captures that sense of our nature creeping in and taking over and stealing our mind. That was really well done and very emotive! A few little edits: I believe "Stralth" might have been intended as "stealth" and "breadth" might have been "breath"? Great writing!

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2023

Thanks , I?m still editing. I?m 79 and can?t see a damn. I corrected stealth but missed breadth. I?ll change it.

reply by Karyn2 on 07-Jan-2023

Good on you! Xx