Swan Story
Four Line poem entry13 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
Beautiful concept and well-chosen image. Meets contest rules! The image of the swan is one of calm, unruffled beauty! Here the short text evokes the sense of light and shadow on water!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
  |
Beautiful concept and well-chosen image. Meets contest rules! The image of the swan is one of calm, unruffled beauty! Here the short text evokes the sense of light and shadow on water!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2022
-
Thank you for an enthusiastic review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This four-line poem, Swan Story, has the proper formatting and focuses on the beautiful swans who hold a special place in our imaginations through their revered place in literature.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
|
This four-line poem, Swan Story, has the proper formatting and focuses on the beautiful swans who hold a special place in our imaginations through their revered place in literature.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
-
Thank you so much for a kind and literary review.
Comment from Faith Williams
I enjoyed your poem especially the line, 'where shadows cannot shatter their world.' Congratulations on your milestone post! Thanks for sharing, and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
|
I enjoyed your poem especially the line, 'where shadows cannot shatter their world.' Congratulations on your milestone post! Thanks for sharing, and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
-
Thank you for taking time to read this little poem during the holiday weekend. Have a super day.
Comment from Celyn
This is a beautiful poem with lovely imagery - I particularly like the comparison between two swans and twin moons. The poem has the correct number of syllables per line for the four-line poetry contest and I do like the poem. However, I don't quite get the last line. I am probably missing something obvious though.
Good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
|
This is a beautiful poem with lovely imagery - I particularly like the comparison between two swans and twin moons. The poem has the correct number of syllables per line for the four-line poetry contest and I do like the poem. However, I don't quite get the last line. I am probably missing something obvious though.
Good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
-
Thank you much for reading and reviewing today. I meant to say in the third line, that in the darkness, where shadow is everywhere just as a function of the night, that the swans have found a dark pond where there are no threats or obstacles to their bliss.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore the swans and this year we did not have any! The usually arrive around October to our local pond but we did not see them this year, as you say they are positive and hopeful, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
|
I adore the swans and this year we did not have any! The usually arrive around October to our local pond but we did not see them this year, as you say they are positive and hopeful, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
-
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this little swan poem. Hm, I have not seen any near me for a while, either. I should probably have gone all the way in downtown to see the aviary to find them.
Comment from judiverse
Congratulations in reaching your milestone. Mine is 3000, if I ever reach it. This is a lovely poem. Excellent imagery with the swans, twin moons. Great alliteration with shadows and shatter. They do suggest a peaceful world. Best of luck in the contest. Merry Christmas to you. judi
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
|
Congratulations in reaching your milestone. Mine is 3000, if I ever reach it. This is a lovely poem. Excellent imagery with the swans, twin moons. Great alliteration with shadows and shatter. They do suggest a peaceful world. Best of luck in the contest. Merry Christmas to you. judi
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2022
-
Thank you for your kind review. 3,000 for you in progress? Wow. I thought I was doing well with 1700-plus apart from fanstory. Have a great Christmas weekend.
Comment from royowen
I think this is a really great entry in this contest, the wording is really great, there are some metaphors which have a great impact in poetry, and you harnessed a couple of goodies, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
|
I think this is a really great entry in this contest, the wording is really great, there are some metaphors which have a great impact in poetry, and you harnessed a couple of goodies, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
-
Thank you for taking the time during the holiday season to read and review this short poem. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
-
My pleasure
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a beautiful haiku and a well chosen picture. It's interesting that like a few other creatures, swans mate for life, yet humans consider animals as lesser life forms. They don't have divorce or domestic abuse or sexual predators they must be on guard against. Death or disaster are the only circumstance that fractures their bond. It makes me wonder who the higher life forms really are. Love the poem.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
|
This is a beautiful haiku and a well chosen picture. It's interesting that like a few other creatures, swans mate for life, yet humans consider animals as lesser life forms. They don't have divorce or domestic abuse or sexual predators they must be on guard against. Death or disaster are the only circumstance that fractures their bond. It makes me wonder who the higher life forms really are. Love the poem.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
-
Thank you for your thoughtful review. I totally agree.
-
You are welcome.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Congratulations on this milestone post and thanks for sharing this lovely verse, filled with beautiful imagery and meaning. Well done. Merry Christmas.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
|
Congratulations on this milestone post and thanks for sharing this lovely verse, filled with beautiful imagery and meaning. Well done. Merry Christmas.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
-
Thank you for your super nice review.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Swan Story" is a Four Line Poetry Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing and good luck with your contest Entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
|
"Swan Story" is a Four Line Poetry Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing and good luck with your contest Entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 23-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2022
-
Thank you for taking the time to read and review.