Shades of Empty
A rewrite of Sound of Silence by Simon and GarfunkelGarfun21 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
This was fabulous and I think the meaning of the song portends the end of the world or at least, from the individual's perspective of life. Sorry I missed voting in this. Congratulations on your prize!!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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This was fabulous and I think the meaning of the song portends the end of the world or at least, from the individual's perspective of life. Sorry I missed voting in this. Congratulations on your prize!!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Congratualtions on you win on the free verse poetry. I certainly agree with the judges on that one. I loved it. As to Shades of Empty I had a lot of fun writint it. I was trying to Sound of Silence make sense to I did come up with a bit of a different meaning. LOL
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I think you did a super job with it! 💖
Comment from Bill Schott
This parody, Shades of Empty, takes the foundation of Sound of Silence and stretches it out to reveal the end of the world and the the next life. Wow!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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This parody, Shades of Empty, takes the foundation of Sound of Silence and stretches it out to reveal the end of the world and the the next life. Wow!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Bill. I really appreciate the review and your comments about it.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You certainly have a talent for lyrics and it was easy to hear the musical notes in my head as I read your words. Rhyming and flow are well done. Good work.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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You certainly have a talent for lyrics and it was easy to hear the musical notes in my head as I read your words. Rhyming and flow are well done. Good work.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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I'm glad you felt I did justice to this haunting song. Thank you for reading and comment on it.
Comment from Sherry SG
I have always loved this song and this melody. I believe the lyrics of the original refer to the Communist rule and the Cold War in the 1960s, and what happens when people don't speak up against oppressive powers etc.
Your lyrics made sense to me - hahaa even though you warned they wouldn't.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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I have always loved this song and this melody. I believe the lyrics of the original refer to the Communist rule and the Cold War in the 1960s, and what happens when people don't speak up against oppressive powers etc.
Your lyrics made sense to me - hahaa even though you warned they wouldn't.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you for a great review and for telling what you believe the first version means. I've heard many diffferent interruptations and yours could be the right one.
Beth
Comment from LJbutterfly
You are right. The melody to this song is haunting, but your re-written lyrics are beautiful and fit this type of melody, perfectly. I especially liked your stanza that began, "Soul", I cried "You cannot see How keeping silent troubles me." I like the rhyming of "feel you, real you, thoughts like feathers flew." To me, these are creatively, sincere thoughts and feelings. You did a great job. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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You are right. The melody to this song is haunting, but your re-written lyrics are beautiful and fit this type of melody, perfectly. I especially liked your stanza that began, "Soul", I cried "You cannot see How keeping silent troubles me." I like the rhyming of "feel you, real you, thoughts like feathers flew." To me, these are creatively, sincere thoughts and feelings. You did a great job. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for the review of this song. I've always loved it and I have trying to rewrite it.
Beth
Comment from June Sargent
I never really knew what S and G's song really meant either. But I guess it's about social isolation and people not communicating. Hah! If they only knew about the devices kids use today. But I believe I understood your version. The past coming yo haunt and taunt you. Anyway. I enjoyed the read!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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I never really knew what S and G's song really meant either. But I guess it's about social isolation and people not communicating. Hah! If they only knew about the devices kids use today. But I believe I understood your version. The past coming yo haunt and taunt you. Anyway. I enjoyed the read!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate the review and comments. I have read other sources that say that is what it means and others who have totally different opinion. WHo knows. I was thrilled ot win second on my attempt to rewrite it.
Beth
Comment from jenintorre
Very clever. Well done. I really like your re-write. It is better than the original. There are some excellent entries in this competition but yours is winning for me so far.Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Very clever. Well done. I really like your re-write. It is better than the original. There are some excellent entries in this competition but yours is winning for me so far.Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for a great review. I'm thrilled to hear you say it is better than the original. I"ve always love the original without fully comprehending the meaning.
Comment from Wendy G
I like it, and I think your words do all support the "shades of empty" idea. You've written it well, as the words do seem to go well with the rhythm and flow of the original song. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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I like it, and I think your words do all support the "shades of empty" idea. You've written it well, as the words do seem to go well with the rhythm and flow of the original song. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you Wendy, you words mean a lot to me. I really appreciate the rhe review.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is just a well-done entry to this Re-write a Song contest. The text is a good size. The message is clearly stated. It's a dark, brooding poem so it fits the mood of the original song. The visual fits perfectly. I will be very surprised if this entry is not in the top three. There's not one area this entry doesn't fit. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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This is just a well-done entry to this Re-write a Song contest. The text is a good size. The message is clearly stated. It's a dark, brooding poem so it fits the mood of the original song. The visual fits perfectly. I will be very surprised if this entry is not in the top three. There's not one area this entry doesn't fit. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you so very much for your lovely review of my rewritten song. You were right. My song did finish in the top tree. I was pleased it won second. Thanks for all the stars.
Beth
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Congratulations! it was well-done. You are welcome.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
"silence is like a cancer that grows." These words really hit home. I have always liked the video song; and you did very well in rewriting the words in your rewritten song. Good job!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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"silence is like a cancer that grows." These words really hit home. I have always liked the video song; and you did very well in rewriting the words in your rewritten song. Good job!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2022
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Thank you Rosemary. I appreciate the review and commentss.
Beth