sunset
In the late afternoon10 total reviews
Comment from Michaela Moore
What a challenge creating a poem with only 6 lines. It is brilliant the way you have made meaning in so few words. And you rhymed your poem also. I love the way your rhyming diction flows smoothly and actually enhances the poem. Lovely job!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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What a challenge creating a poem with only 6 lines. It is brilliant the way you have made meaning in so few words. And you rhymed your poem also. I love the way your rhyming diction flows smoothly and actually enhances the poem. Lovely job!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind review
Comment from jacquelyn popp
This poem is very well written and enjoyable to read. Even though it has so few lines, it says so much by the descriptive words that you used, and the imagery that it helped to create. When there is a sunset, it really is beautiful and amazing to be able to watch it. Really good poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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This poem is very well written and enjoyable to read. Even though it has so few lines, it says so much by the descriptive words that you used, and the imagery that it helped to create. When there is a sunset, it really is beautiful and amazing to be able to watch it. Really good poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An ambient write full of imagery and I enjoyed your recollection of the sunset here on a clear night when you lose your frown, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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An ambient write full of imagery and I enjoyed your recollection of the sunset here on a clear night when you lose your frown, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind review
Comment from gudbjorg
A lovely poem. A powerful proverbs and sayings, things that come deep dowm your heart. If we look at beauty and let it encourage your soul and spirit to be more loving and thoughtful if iteress. The flow of the poem was good and it was ameesningfulnto me. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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A lovely poem. A powerful proverbs and sayings, things that come deep dowm your heart. If we look at beauty and let it encourage your soul and spirit to be more loving and thoughtful if iteress. The flow of the poem was good and it was ameesningfulnto me. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Well done and meritorious of being in the running to win. ..............................................................................................................................................................
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Well done and meritorious of being in the running to win. ..............................................................................................................................................................
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Fleedleflump
It's all gorgeous, but I adore the second half - It's smoother than buttered silk and slipped across my mind's tongue beautifully. What a great way to tribute the sunset.
Mike
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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It's all gorgeous, but I adore the second half - It's smoother than buttered silk and slipped across my mind's tongue beautifully. What a great way to tribute the sunset.
Mike
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I don't know what to say. Thank you very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This six-line poem, Sunset, has the required formatting plus independent uni-rhyming tercets, and finds the harsh light's leaving to be the best part of the day........................
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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This six-line poem, Sunset, has the required formatting plus independent uni-rhyming tercets, and finds the harsh light's leaving to be the best part of the day........................
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Very perceptive. Thank you.
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
Very nice words and image. Truly says what you intended.
I might be wrong, but I think you can do away with the apostrophes.
Nice work. Thank you for sharing. Good luck
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Very nice words and image. Truly says what you intended.
I might be wrong, but I think you can do away with the apostrophes.
Nice work. Thank you for sharing. Good luck
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
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YW
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought you did a great job with only six lines. The part about losing your frown at first didn't make sense. But I guess you didn't lie the sun - too bright. Very creative use of the prompt. I enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I thought you did a great job with only six lines. The part about losing your frown at first didn't make sense. But I guess you didn't lie the sun - too bright. Very creative use of the prompt. I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the six-lined poem contest. The text is an okay size. The message is clearly stated. However, the sky when the sun goes down is typically a darker color than azure, which is a pretty lighter blue. That's a great personification line. I would just put a darker color blue. The visual fits well. Good luck if the contest is not over.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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This is a good entry to the six-lined poem contest. The text is an okay size. The message is clearly stated. However, the sky when the sun goes down is typically a darker color than azure, which is a pretty lighter blue. That's a great personification line. I would just put a darker color blue. The visual fits well. Good luck if the contest is not over.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your very helpful comments.
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You are welcome.
