Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 136 "Whitstable Angels on Horseback"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
3 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Aiona,
What beaver treasures do you gather to create rye. Is this rye for the bread or the liquor?
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Hi Aiona,
What beaver treasures do you gather to create rye. Is this rye for the bread or the liquor?
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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LOL! Thanks for the review, Joan. Technically, the recipe doesn't call for rye, but I used it because it was one syllable. In the recipe, the bread is just what the "angels" sit on. Kind of like the base for bruschetta. Sorry it's so confusing! Any suggestions for improvement of the poem, other than probably making the recipe a bit less metaphorical?
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You're welcome, Aiona. If this is a bread recipe, you can use wheat instead of rye. Because wheat flour is used in bread.
Joan
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It's not a bread recipe. The bread just goes under the "angels." Whitstable Angels is just oysters wrapped with bacon and grilled. "On Horseback" means "on toast." Apparently it's a recipe from a place southeast of London.
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It sounds like the way a diner would describe their food.
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LOL!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have no idea what you have cooked up here but it sounds exciting, a fun nonet for the contest with the right amount of syllables for each line, I wish you luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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I have no idea what you have cooked up here but it sounds exciting, a fun nonet for the contest with the right amount of syllables for each line, I wish you luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review, Dolly. You're not the only one who was confused. So I'll edit it by including the regular recipe at the bottom.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry was in great form, Aiona.
Great job with the syllable count per line. I
liked the whole presentation--artwork, smooth
flow of words, and use of descriptive words. I
have no idea what you were referring too, though.
I would add what these 'things' were in author notes.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Your contest entry was in great form, Aiona.
Great job with the syllable count per line. I
liked the whole presentation--artwork, smooth
flow of words, and use of descriptive words. I
have no idea what you were referring too, though.
I would add what these 'things' were in author notes.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 22-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
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Good idea, Jan.